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Dear Darkness

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Dear Darkness

Postby superman11 » Sep 9th, '13, 23:06

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Can't believe I only just discovered this section. Got a couple of verses and stuff that I've worked on recently. I'll start with this one. I wrote it to this instrumental https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BFpqc1_YhRc

(Starts at 0:09 if anyone was wondering.)

Dear Darkness,
It's been a while but here we are again.
Deep thoughts made go and flow with the pen.
Just say when, the switch flips, lights go dim,
your first mistake was when you thought you might know him.
Got you like damn, since when's this guy so grim,
this bag a weed got my eyes so squint.
You better hope you can fly or swim,
tossin bodies off a building to an ocean, this is how far gone I've been.
So here's this letter, dear darkness, flows darkened.
Half past midnight, and your hearing creaks in your apartment,
dark shadow in the doorway sweeps across the arches,
got a mind that's cold and heartless that I can't harness.
But I still manage the sharpness of pure artists.
Most of the game is weak and pure garbage,
you don't belong here, so I came to cause carnage.
And this whole time you thought I seemed harmless, but that I can't promise.
Writing letters to you, cause I can hear the pain calling,
shadows taunting in the night while the rains falling.
You think your straight balling and your shits awesome,
yet your small mind couldn't produce thoughts this haunting.
It's like clockwork, this shit comes easy to me.
You flow awkward, Your words are like disease to a beat.
Go call doctors, you need help once he's off the leash,
A straight monster, sick flow yet I'm calm as the breeze.
Jeez, it never stops as I creep farther,
words are sharp as a blade that can pierce armor.
No one can hear you, so go ahead scream harder.
This heat that I spray the only reason why you seem warmer.
But don't get it twisted, you'll be left in the cold tonight.
Step back soon as he holds a mic
Just roll and light, while we gaze at these northern lights.
til I'm gone, Dark as a scary movie,
Love yours truly.

Any feedback is appreciated. :y:
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Re: Dear Darkness

Postby Elision » Sep 10th, '13, 07:29

I love these kind of verses. :y:
By the way was this at all inspired by Tech's 3rd verse of Meant to Happen?
i'm comin in, drivin my short bus
with this nose i don't need a torch up
bustin through, light the industry's porsche up
comin after who didn't support us...
imma change your brain bring
every wicked bit of strange to mainstream
-Tech N9ne #SpecialEffects2015
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Re: Dear Darkness

Postby superman11 » Sep 10th, '13, 15:18

Rollefsen wrote:
Elision wrote:I love these kind of verses. :y:
By the way was this at all inspired by Tech's 3rd verse of Meant to Happen?

This is what I thought aswell.

Good shit man, loved it.



I actually never even heard that song. I'll give it a listen now though.

But thanks a lot guys, I'll be posting here more often, got some stuff a little later today.
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Re: Dear Darkness

Postby Halftongue Dre » Sep 11th, '13, 19:04

Pretty dope man. Read it all the way through and it was great. I like your style. Pretty witty yo. Keep writing. We should do one together sometime..
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Re: Dear Darkness

Postby superman11 » Sep 12th, '13, 00:11

Halftongue Dre wrote:Pretty dope man. Read it all the way through and it was great. I like your style. Pretty witty yo. Keep writing. We should do one together sometime..


Send me a PM whenever, give me a concept and I'll run with it. Thanks! :y:

(That goes for anyone who wants to collab.)
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