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My eclipse..

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My eclipse..

Postby Flamez » Sep 11th, '13, 19:16

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=163773&p=2319511

It’s my solar eclipse obscuring the light bringing the darkness combined
twisted shadows unwind raging down like meteor showers designed
let me remind you I’m feeling confined inside blinding my eyesight
its like bright lights shine on me feeling like stage fright its fight night
lost in my own self black and white colors ignite me to green light
my own words overwrite I'm stuck in a maze feeling ablaze like dog days
confused in a daze it's judgement day, I’m like Jason Bourne’s extreme ways
I'm playing a game today cutting puzzle pieces up you can call me jigsaw
I'm having fatal flaws hearing the jaws theme song about to withdraw
trapped inside left feeling with a shock and aw something I can’t ignore
Feel like my own prisoner of war collapsed hitting the ground floor
Brace myself for what’s in store this eclipse in me starting an all out war
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Re: My eclipse..

Postby superman11 » Sep 12th, '13, 00:13

Multi's all over the place in this one, love it man!

That ending :y:

"I'm playing a game today cutting puzzle pieces up you can call me jigsaw
I'm having fatal flaws hearing the jaws theme song about to withdraw
trapped inside left feeling with a shock and aw something I can’t ignore
Feel like my own prisoner of war collapsed hitting the ground floor
Brace myself for what’s in store this eclipse in me starting an all out war"

Sick!
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Re: My eclipse..

Postby Flamez » Sep 12th, '13, 19:39

Thanks for the feed man.
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Re: My eclipse..

Postby Eedee » Sep 14th, '13, 13:19

Maybe it's just me but I didn't see that many multis in there, some nice two-syllables though.

I think the transition-thoughts of this piece was the best part. I like the random references and shit though haha
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