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'In Control'

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'In Control'

Postby superman11 » Sep 12th, '13, 00:21

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Wrote this right after it dropped.. Loved the beat.

"In Control"

Soon as I enter the room, all you lames will oblige.
You bitches couldn't kill my vibe no matter how hard you tried.
Shits a game to me, you faggots just along for the ride,
raps a gun range and I got you maggots all in my sights.
All jokes aside, I'm all for laughs but I won't say this twice,
so have your ears ready to listen and your eyes opened wide.
Those who don't follow the kings are subject to death.
Enjoy your last breath, fore you get bodied and wrecked,
You scream and beg for the cops, you want me under arrest
I got fam in there, as your case is swept under the desk.
I'm your worst nightmare, don't give a fuck, don't fight fair,
Anybody wanna challenge me, mother fuckers I'm right here.
I'm light years ahead and you quite scared.
Fuck the throne I'm the king of this shit sitting right in my chair,
And my heir is what grows from my head, rest of the worlds unworthy,
all thirsty for the crown but nah, you can't hurt me.
So kneel and curtesy like the bitch that you are, I'm nervy,
Unearthly, and that's word to the woman that birthed me.
This a home run derby as you all swing for the fences,
while I'm behind you cocked back, swinging for vengeance,
for the genre you killed, so now I'm teachin you lessons.
Fuck a consequence, I'm reckless, flows endless.
And that's the difference between me and ya'll.
Instead if praying you'll be seeing me fall,
why don't you step up and see me in a brawl.
Try and body me dog, I'll win that war
And blades will enter each one of your artery walls.
Work half ass and im still here raising the bar,
we the leaders of this shit and you dogs are just chasing a car.
I want it all, you never heard me this hungry before,
my plate is full as can be but I still want what's in yours.
Yet your girls hungry for me, she wants inter-course,
But I got mine prick, and no I'm not feelin yours
And I'm not into whores, yet they still flock at me.
Yeah I'm cocky, what you want from me.
You can suck your teeth, and stomp your feet
But there's no stopping me.
Never get knocked from my feet,
I'll stand my ground no matter what's underneath.

Feedback always appreciated. :y:
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Re: 'In Control'

Postby NotFinished » Sep 12th, '13, 00:25

dope as fuck
"Take Your Shoes off, Let Your Hair Down..."
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Re: 'In Control'

Postby Eedee » Sep 12th, '13, 00:58

Those opening lines, whew. I loved the Kendrick reference/dig. Good shit.
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Re: 'In Control'

Postby Flamez » Sep 12th, '13, 03:34

Sick stuff man keep it up.
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Re: 'In Control'

Postby superman11 » Sep 12th, '13, 16:48

Thanks everyone!
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