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Soma Pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 15th, '13, 01:40

feed - superman random bars

Normal life isnt quite like my state of mind
I think of never riding lemons and light is lime
Im white and it implies i wear suit n ties
Like the justin guy flow is scuba dive
Im under the surface the norm where your all so perfect
Im perfected in urgent spit intelligent ill hurt your men
Purple blue choke your crew in front of any social group
I told you dude you screw with me ill drive into you
Get a quick fix to your house half missin now
Spilt milk flipping cows bitches get me aroused
Harder than the padd-le we smackem around
i got the sense of a sensei and a basset hound
silver bitch and im back around leavem cleveland orange n brown
Achievements no beefin at least for a while now
Finally gotta style down changed how i started out
Now i standout like standup in a haunted house
Laugh at death it wears a semen scented blouse
Half a mess im still alive but i took the scenic route
Big amounts of stress laziness effects most thoughts
Sorry making less of myself as fuckin most are
Career never paid mind but ive paid fines
Fuck laws never believe in crimes or offensive lines
For the record im , high as my witness at the bench sit quick
Give ribs a swift kick and get locked like pits grip
intertwine cartilage in my prime starting shit
Combine coke measure mixed like a blender
With the cut cheaper to make me spend it
Molasses and a glass of spit
Blunts forgot i ashed in it and took a sip gagged a classic
oldschool scratch the disc shit that they bobble with
on the bus shit zone out the scenery
as long as you see me on relentless beats
i speak heavenly ahead of my time
so sometimes i question is this head mine
genius combined criminal mind my death is certain
in class used to sit next to perfect
till i killed him one day with an innocent verdict
punctured him with chopsticks
leaking like a hot dish leave the scene ive got this
Scenery tape sins with forgiven faith
Pray to fictional characters the shit is embarrassment
Too many things ive been challenged with
Fly writing have a talon grip passionate and talented
Mark it on ya calendar more than a regular
Tour and bus in tightest hysteria
Fuck a mic im bout to bury ya ex the treasure brah, bro?
Faggot just be glad if you can piss through a hose
over you know how it goes oj today with the case closed
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Re: Keystyle time

Postby Just Silver » Sep 15th, '13, 23:31

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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Eedee » Sep 16th, '13, 02:03

Yay, I liked the Justin line hehe.

This was pretty cool. I sorta got the flow at times, other times I didn't, but yeah... just work on tightening up your flow, and posting a beat if you can to flow too. That's always helpful.
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 16th, '13, 02:06

Eedee wrote:Yay, I liked the Justin line hehe.

This was pretty cool. I sorta got the flow at times, other times I didn't, but yeah... just work on tightening up your flow, and posting a beat if you can to flow too. That's always helpful.

thanks guy its harder for me to post with beats sometimes and i cant copy n paste

PT.3 i may do it over a beat :smoking:
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Eedee » Sep 16th, '13, 02:08

Hehe, that's fine, man. You mind feeding my "Phantasms" piece? It's getting slept on haha
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Kill You » Sep 18th, '13, 06:21

That JT line. :wub:
"I guess this shit took an unexpected twist like the neck of the fricken Exorcist!"

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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 18th, '13, 14:44

lol now im pretty sure i rap better on Somas rather than Tramadol
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 1st, '13, 03:46

In the limelight in a lemon, shit, that fucking deep.

Great opener.
I'm from South London from Westminster to the back streets of Thornton Heath.
Off Brigstock Road.

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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Oct 1st, '13, 11:26

ilovebender.com wrote:In the limelight in a lemon, shit, that fucking deep.

Great opener.

thanks guy lol :y:
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby 4Corners » Oct 2nd, '13, 03:03

You can tell by how you word your bars, and the wordplay within each bar, that you can rhyme. Nice job man. I like the line about gagging a classic.
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Re: Soma Pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Oct 2nd, '13, 03:11

thanks guy i really like this piece too u should join my cypher we have a few ppl so far like 3-4 we need more
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