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Tramadol pt.2

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Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 17th, '13, 00:08

feed resurface fame *cant copy n paste

beat Larry Czsonka action bronson

More trashed than the curbside i say fuckem worldwide
Its what we live by or im bout to die
No lives to live no 9 to 6 polished grips
Shinning so i see you behind me and dip
like a ranch chip yet i handle my shit
Confrontation in front do that combat in the back
Need to explain what i want or do u know all of that
Have a heartattack and break you in half pill caps
Emptied all your blood in a bag i dont need drugs to rap
Coming with mask like halloween no ones hard as me
im smashed glass when they're pickin up the sharpest piece
Class act sittin in the front for attendance
Suspended by the weed that is lit like christmas
Permission to spit sick nah never needed it
high as Expedia and shit if you need a lift
Ill give ya a dropkick yall just sloppiness
Im the writer with the thoughts of Yoda
Turn ya to an organ donor funeral organs for ya
6 feet you sleep deeper than i stand tall
Im the man to call creepin techs with a protocol
Overhaul your whole carcass off the cliff in a U-Haul
Your too small off topic shit but u know what im on
Your micro im the titled giant on a tight rope
Surfin motherfuckin tidal waves with a blindfold
Im overdosed your only kinda dope
Like a kilo of coke your only a milligram
You gettin middle man i wanna be the better man
in a higher placement high off no occupation
Stop in your places and get robbed different races
Switchin flows like IVs in the various patients
Im mad im impatient and spit i dont like the taste of it
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Kill You » Sep 18th, '13, 00:48

Was having trouble imagining the flow at a few parts but ultimately a decent effort. :y:

You can still have PJ's, you earned them yo.
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 18th, '13, 00:51

thanks guy yea i sorta messed around a little with flow
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby enjinn » Sep 19th, '13, 11:59

this is a good verse...and you had many dope lines like the smashed glass one...looking forward to reading more from you
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 19th, '13, 12:39

thnx guy i like that part too lol
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Flamez » Sep 19th, '13, 16:07

Nice was reading it while I heard the beat well more like rapping it. haha it's nice though liked it.
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 20th, '13, 16:29

last bump then new project
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Sep 20th, '13, 16:34

thanks guy i gotta do some feed as well later tonight or tomorrow :flower:
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 19th, '13, 16:33

Love that organ, funeral organ wordplay, Silv!
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Re: Tramadol pt.2

Postby Just Silver » Oct 19th, '13, 16:48

thanks guy we all miss your writing i know i do :y:
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