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Miss Me

Postby Flamez » Nov 21st, '13, 20:28

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talking shit about me bad idea you will get killed
skilled with guns spilling blood your fate is sealed
puzzled look no response bitch you fucked up
lips sealed with elmer’s glue keep your mouth shut
fuckin’ slut take these nuts home in a can of planters
put em in a blender feed your whole family out of anger
I’ll walk by your house like a bystander knock on your door
go indoors and sniff the panties out of your drawers
fuck you on the porch once last time before your dead
so that you never forget you cheated on me, no regrets
what you told me bitch I loved you instead you disrespected me
I never disrespected you and now you miss me terribly?
texting me bitch you can’t even call me? fuck your texts
you miss the sex? Well too bad bitch here’s a fuckin’ kleenex
having mixed feelings are we stop pretending like you care
I wish you the best though wait no, I’ll kill you bitch I swear…

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Re: Miss Me

Postby Cinderella Stan » Nov 21st, '13, 22:55

Fucking hoes man... I like this a lot, flows great in my head with Em's voice haha.
...as the world turns and I keep growing older
I'll be living this hip hop till hell freezes over...
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Boston » Nov 22nd, '13, 00:50

not bad, it flows but it seems like the same exact flow, you should try changing the flow every 4ish bars and get use to it. this is a good piece though, like the story telling. keep it up man.
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Just Silver » Nov 22nd, '13, 02:37

It's decent flows alright at points liked the elmers glue line
Nice imagery you should Sign up for the tournament

Only thing I can say is you should develop different flows

But your a good writer you should be more active :y:
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Flamez » Nov 22nd, '13, 23:06

Thanks guys and yeah I'll try and change the flow. We'll see about the tourney haha
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Francesco » Nov 24th, '13, 14:02

Nice drop... keep it up little homie!
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Flamez » Nov 26th, '13, 21:38

Thanks bro
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Re: Miss Me

Postby Francesco » Nov 29th, '13, 17:08

Flamez wrote:Thanks bro


Anytime little homie... :y:
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Re: Miss Me

Postby IBasicallyRage » Nov 30th, '13, 18:05

This is awesome, flows amazing. Keep it up brah.
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Re: Miss Me

Postby shadyblogger » Nov 30th, '13, 18:24

Yeah that was pretty dope
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