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bigray - pound cake freestyle

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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby Just Silver » Nov 23rd, '13, 03:56

Good shit guy started a little shaky I liked the Pepsi line

Flow improved throughout the piece didn't care for the first few lines

I feel the ending should be expanded a tiny bit but it's still a nice piece
It's different :y:
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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby Francesco » Nov 24th, '13, 01:39

I love it homie....
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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby sneakerheadshady » Nov 25th, '13, 01:09

Its pretty good . I like it( not using this as a lof BTW)
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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby Flamez » Nov 27th, '13, 01:51

Nice read man. It's good I like it yo.
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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby Francesco » Nov 29th, '13, 01:31

Anytime homie... :y:
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Re: bigray - pound cake freestyle

Postby Boston » Nov 30th, '13, 15:32

Flow works good. I dont like the pepsi line that much but the overall vibe was good and story telling was there. Keep it up man
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