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uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 4th, '13, 20:13

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Through grades 9 and 10 ive spent time with him
Before my grandmother died in the trailer we lived in
A mother to you and myself I can't tell the difference
My own mother wasn't assistin
Rather have the heroin sizzlin
It's a mystery why everyone is so sick of me
But not mitchy he sorta believed in me
Sorta bitchy but I understood how he was seeing things
Wanted me to succeed even bought me a laptop
Before I even smoked weed I thank u for that but
It got stolen by a heroin junkie and it sucked
And he was married to my grandmother for money n drugs
A thousand dollars for that Acer I couldn't trace it
Didn't have it for a year so the money was wasted
But mitchy you should give me another chance
Why's the mouse sticky can you pickup your pants
Oh yea I should say he was a porn freak
Tissues and moans even in the morning
While he sits on his throne and think he's king
But didn't even pay rent where he was staying
But I guess pros outweighed the cons
At least he knew where to go and how to move on
In life.. and wanted the same for me
He knew my upbringing it sucks to be a leech
He was grown with experience and bald as can be
I just need a job where I barely gotta speak
I had the smarts ..I just need it part time
It never happened now my future is a semen napkin
I wish it was still back then and the drugs never happened
Pills turn to crack and a buncha madness no college classes
He even offered that and it's still on the table
I will take the chance once I've gotten more stable
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 5th, '13, 19:14

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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Francesco » Dec 6th, '13, 14:29

Punch all of 'em homeboy... get 'em one by one & take 'em out! Good one too... Where's CP sequel though?
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 6th, '13, 14:34

Idk if he likes mitchy but thanks guy
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Francesco » Dec 6th, '13, 14:42

Just Silver wrote:Idk if he likes mitchy but thanks guy


No problem... keep 'em coming.
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 7th, '13, 14:31

Last bump new project
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:11

The real last bump then new project
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:20

I like it but I felt it could have been better. Maybe the rhymes and the subject matter.
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:23

shadyblogger wrote:I like it but I felt it could have been better. Maybe the rhymes and the subject matter.

Yea I feel the same

But this is a true story so it's a little more difficult to tweak :sweating:
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:24

Just Silver wrote:
shadyblogger wrote:I like it but I felt it could have been better. Maybe the rhymes and the subject matter.

Yea I feel the same

But this is a true story so it's a little more difficult to tweak :sweating:


Oh really hmmm. I felt it wasn't one of your strongest ones. I don't know maybe if you told it differently. Ah whatever maybe just focus on making your new project dope.
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby Just Silver » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:26

Definitely guy thanks for the feed
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Re: uncle mitchy mitch pt.1

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 23rd, '13, 18:27

No prob
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