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Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Eedee)

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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Eedee » Dec 20th, '13, 02:24

I can tell you had fun writing this, Horse. You have some clever lines in there, and your rhyming is getting pretty legit. Just gotta work on making everything smooth and shit. Ludda horse cream all day doe

Silver was Silver, I guess haha. Some lines didn't even rhyme but that's why they say "yolo", right?

Sneaker, you cute little piece of shit. Your's was pretty funny.

Horse, rename this to "Can't Be Fed"
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby sneakerheadshady » Dec 20th, '13, 02:25

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horse wrote:You’ll never go gold, that’s why you’re just silver

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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Just Silver » Dec 20th, '13, 02:28

What didn't rhyme tho lol :o
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Eedee » Dec 20th, '13, 02:33

Just Silver wrote:What didn't rhyme tho lol :o


Sittin' shotgun, the scumbag that never brought one
But just knives to stab you'll end up as alive as my dad
Confined in some football pads with a crooked 'stache


I know the schemes are scattered, but if this was on a beat, it would sound so off because of the placement of the schemes.
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Just Silver » Dec 20th, '13, 02:39

Eedee wrote:
Just Silver wrote:What didn't rhyme tho lol :o


Sittin' shotgun, the scumbag that never brought one
But just knives to stab you'll end up as alive as my dad
Confined in some football pads with a crooked 'stache


I know the schemes are scattered, but if this was on a beat, it would sound so off because of the placement of the schemes.

It switches flow throughout although this is hard to see with no indication :sweating:
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 20th, '13, 20:12

Wow. The whole thing was dope. Nice job guys. And you're right. I didn't see this coming... When did you guys plan all this?
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 20th, '13, 20:20

Horsebot3K wrote:
shadyblogger wrote:Wow. The whole thing was dope. Nice job guys. And you're right. I didn't see this coming... When did you guys plan all this?

Thanks. :b: It was planned about an hour after Night Light dropped.


Dope. Good job on all of you guys. Do you wanna do a collab?
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Just Silver » Dec 20th, '13, 20:58

I'm down guy
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 20th, '13, 21:35

Just Silver wrote:I'm down guy


So the collab is Horsebot, Just Silver, and me
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Just Silver » Dec 20th, '13, 22:11

Yea if he's up for it lol
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 20th, '13, 23:53

Just Silver wrote:Yea if he's up for it lol


He is.
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Slim Fiasco » Dec 21st, '13, 13:30

Good job guys, what I loved most of all was the choice of words. Like, some real cool sounding words that you put in there. Just Silver's verse was my favorite, I think you did a great job man.
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Just Silver » Dec 21st, '13, 13:33

Thanks guy :y:

I think this is being slept on lol :(
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby Slim Fiasco » Dec 21st, '13, 13:46

Just Silver wrote:Thanks guy :y:

I think this is being slept on lol :(


Sure thing. And don't worry, even if you made the dopest song ever, it'd probably get overlooked without social proof so to say. But yeah, do the work on your part and enjoy it as much as possible, the rest can and will come. Slowly or fast, it doesn't matter, just focus on the product quality.
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Re: Can't Be Trusted (feat. Just Silver, Yung Sneaker and Ee

Postby sneakerheadshady » Jan 6th, '14, 12:33

Slim Fiasco wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Thanks guy :y:

I think this is being slept on lol :(


Sure thing. And don't worry, even if you made the dopest song ever, it'd probably get overlooked without social proof so to say. But yeah, do the work on your part and enjoy it as much as possible, the rest can and will come. Slowly or fast, it doesn't matter, just focus on the product quality.

im in awe of how completely true this post is :confusion:
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