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Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 5th, '14, 00:59

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Let's start a new edition of linguistics and rhythm
Fresh as tic tacs the big fags skittles fruity and brittle
Spit flames that sizzle makem all feel my visual
In my actual dreams Krugers ruger.. you awaken in bloody sheets
Comfortably I flow over beats sailor to the wind
Your boat speed isn't close to me dock up im goin in
Ipod dock stuck cause you just downloaded him
He's so dope and low-key so you'll never notice him
Focus on me on the prize I unwrap in mind
Trying to shake myself loose and see what's inside
Open it up straight sickening infectious stay from distance
I recommend you diss him cause suicide could be a decision
Rope tied tighter than a freshman in prison when hes fucked
Never slipping or getting stuck just my essence of herbal buds
Accepted life as a downer crashed my plane in the mud
Worthless as fuck sex with Lincoln on the shiny coin
Pennies in her loins then came my birth as a boy
Shot guns as a toy playground straight destroyed
I'm playing around fictional sounds sound so choice
The warrior with words worried that the world's warped
Flipped itself lost humanity and went Corporate
Business bought out the music we were enjoying
So I went crazy new school wrote what I liked
Doing what I must just to win the fucking fight
Roll the dice life's a role are you rolling it right
If your stuck get at least a 7 in your life
Keep paying the whole night dice is snow bright
Your guys are snow white Disney movie crew
Look at you who do you think you are kid shit
Get to fitness before a swift fist is tailor made for the witness
That's you bitches a waste of life
Id stab you and shake hands with Satan twice
Then I ate your wife drank some Sprite sorry for last night
I was mad hyped my dick was harder than a crack pipe
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 5th, '14, 21:18

Bump
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby shadyblogger » Jan 6th, '14, 01:44

Damn this was one of your better ones imo. It started out intense to me and just kept going with like a hypnotizing flow. Some clever lines and wordplay densely packed in. Very good.
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 6th, '14, 01:50

Thanks guy this was pretty much slept on but I'm looking forward to our collab as well as my new project
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 7th, '14, 15:33

Last bump then new project
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby LilWayneNorwayLove » Jan 7th, '14, 21:26

Hey i'm new on this forum and don't know how long u have been writhing, but this looked rly good to me. i'v thought about trying to write shit myself (i don't know shit about music tho) and have read a tonn of lyrices, like to learn somthing. and i find it funny, cuz this is better (my opinion) lyric/rhyme wise than much of what i have read by known artists. i can't point out anything, cuz u probably know a LOT more abut this than me. but it looked strong, and i could feel the flow when reading it, especially the second time (i'm not rly good at english, as u can se from my writhing, so had to read it 3 times just to understand it all lol)

"I'm gone like delete and erase (the lead in a race)"
"No brake lights on my car rear"
"Magazine full of bullets, you can be my cover girl"
"I'm outstandin' like standin' outside Up in the twister and walkin' Not damaged"
"Shots through the driver side, that mean the driver died, Car crash kill the passenger, double homicide"
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 7th, '14, 22:20

Thanks so much guy and ya you just gotta practice its especially hard if English isn't your first language

But u can use this link as feedback and u can write a little something you'll get pointers and stuff from the tr community
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Francesco » Jan 9th, '14, 14:36

That was even better... :y:
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '14, 14:47

Lol thanks this one has less of a subject than my newest piece
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Francesco » Jan 9th, '14, 14:50

You've been a work horse for a while now so I'll keep supporting your shit homie... :y: Anytime.
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Mar 4th, '14, 02:46

Time for something new
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Re: Flowvention. 2014

Postby Just Silver » Mar 10th, '14, 03:37

Extremely slept on gtta find a pen for my next project last bump
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