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Postby LilWayneNorwayLove » Jan 5th, '14, 03:01

Hey, i know i'm new to the forum, and that i sould help out befour asking for anything... but i'm just gonna throw out some lyric that i made to night cuz i could not sleep :(
anyway 2 nights ago i got inspired to try and write a rapish thing.. never written more than 3 lines befour. i thought it was fun and wrote again yesterday and to night.
(this post was bloceked so it's more days ago now)
So this is all i have ever made: pliz throw all your hate at me, or not ;)

Part 1, part 2, part 3, every part of life is a part of me/
And pardon me, if that part of me, is what u are to be, what u wanna be/
I just act accordingly* to these shitty people.. and if u look over to the wall u see/
It's written cuz i sound so awkwardly../
Come walk with me, baby talk to me, u know u can always talk with me/
And if he told u that your a 3.. wait
Numbers don't lie and your shaped like an 8/
If he sees 3, then he can't be straight/
like, hold on mate, she just walked out of hevans gate/
And we're on a date, her eays so bright went to ice skate/
That's the bait, i got this girl on a silver plate.. shes all i ate/
She looked so fine and she smelled so grate/
Shaved a thinn line, and i loved the taste/
enough with the smal talk, her pussy is a water park/
Every thing i do turn her oon/
That's autostart, i kiss every single bodypart, her body is a work of art/
I got so hard and her skirt's so short /
I think i love her, ogh well thats the thought/

And now somthing els...
It's dark inn here, i cry in bed/
I miss u so much, the smell of your hair/
The things u said, the way u care/
i cry at night, so much i fear/
Loosing u now, is to much to bare/
Life's no road, it's a bunch of stares/
I could end up as a gardeneer, an old man with a big brown beard/
so what to choose for this life long stair? i could just be the f*cing mayor (meeer)
Figuring out what path to take/
every ilution that i make myself/
Don't belive the excitement in my face/
U alredu know it's fucking fake!/
Fuck that cake u baked, i don't want it/
Ther's so much i can take, so much i can have/
Get a tablet for chrismas, and i just get mad/
It's all so sad, the contary gon mad/
It's all fucked up and we should all feel bad/
Smal boy got presents from his dad/
father gave him 3, but when he was done he had filled 5 bags/
He had gotten so much, not even thanked his dad :( /
And when u think about this spoild kid/
another kid is making music from 2 lids/
and cant even dream of one of the things given to this first kid


Money u think will make u smile/
but that's not mor than a simple lie/
it's what make some people live and some people die/
Spend 3k on a suit, feel important cuz your wearing a tie?/
So nice, screaming "me u need to bye!"/
And while u mister "well I'm such a fancy guy" is sitting watching the news and eating some pie/
A father died, a boy on the screen saying his last bay-bay/
It was a shame he died! But they had no food, nor clean water supply/
There's millions of people like this, and u don't care to provide?/
thinking "i look fancy, they can go on with there miserable life"/
the saddest part.. So can I.../
So I have my money, i'm not giving it away/
Earn more then they make in there life on a single day/
I got to much things, but life's not okay/
To many thoughts, do I have a reason to live I'm unhappy every day is gray/
A society were it's okay/
for some dude to post away/
about how his friend is gay/
and people comment shit they don't even dare to say/
A world were your personality is worth less than how much u weigh/
Living with comments like, Christmas is saved, that pig we can slay!/
Schooles were u get spitt on for getting an A/
were it's bad to be smart, play your life and study /
I hope non of u sthink this is okay/
Turining a coolorfull life into somthing gray/
Some think ther better because of money/
Screming fuck logic, i'm way more fancy/
It's a shame to say, but this is Norway/

Oh and as u can see, my engelish is... :n: anyway just ask away, or and say what's totaly wrong :facepalm2
Last edited by LilWayneNorwayLove on Jan 10th, '14, 15:56, edited 2 times in total.

"I'm gone like delete and erase (the lead in a race)"
"No brake lights on my car rear"
"Magazine full of bullets, you can be my cover girl"
"I'm outstandin' like standin' outside Up in the twister and walkin' Not damaged"
"Shots through the driver side, that mean the driver died, Car crash kill the passenger, double homicide"
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby CanadaPure » Jan 5th, '14, 03:14

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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby CanadaPure » Jan 10th, '14, 03:08

This guy sent me his link of feed, I'm too lazy to post it, so just leave this open mods pls
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby Francesco » Jan 10th, '14, 15:43

It's aight... :y:
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby LilWayneNorwayLove » Jan 10th, '14, 23:18

Hey, just asking but the one of u who make your own lyrics... when u started, did u try to match it with a beat or anything? or did u just write somthing cuz making it to a beat is much harder?

"I'm gone like delete and erase (the lead in a race)"
"No brake lights on my car rear"
"Magazine full of bullets, you can be my cover girl"
"I'm outstandin' like standin' outside Up in the twister and walkin' Not damaged"
"Shots through the driver side, that mean the driver died, Car crash kill the passenger, double homicide"
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby Just Silver » Jan 13th, '14, 21:08

This was quite decent for not being fluent with the English language

Some of it was boring but there was some pretty cool flows in the beginning and throughout
Just work on some imagery at first

I don't know any other language so this may be easier said than done :(
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby LilWayneNorwayLove » Jan 14th, '14, 22:30

When u say this :Just work on some imagery at first. can u explain?

"I'm gone like delete and erase (the lead in a race)"
"No brake lights on my car rear"
"Magazine full of bullets, you can be my cover girl"
"I'm outstandin' like standin' outside Up in the twister and walkin' Not damaged"
"Shots through the driver side, that mean the driver died, Car crash kill the passenger, double homicide"
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Re: Hey yall! Just random lyric.

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 17th, '14, 05:17

Lifes no road its a bunch of stairs

Was really digging that line^ your style kinda reminds me of mine... shit was smooth bro


Tho it wasnt very consistant. It had a good message

Keep writing bro , You got lots of potential
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