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Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 9th, '14, 18:17

Young nigga named dewey
Straight outta the crew full of loonies
Saved up my whole life and i barely got a loonie
So many nines it sounds like an uzi
Decimals cunning, get out and rob a bank while the engine is running
Youre not getting any younger while im benjamin button
When it comes to rap im obsessive compulsive
Id even listen to drake cuz its better than nothing
Hes the Captain of the ship with a pirate sword
While.deweys just trying to climb aboard
Got a nosebleed from all the linez i snort
Plus This ecstacys fuckin up my spinal cord
Niggas remind me of a dinosaur ,
Cuz their rhymes are old like time before
Youd get chink eyed from my strawberry hazen
But idk if its good weed cuz he was already asian
I Already paid for this prostitute
So ima fuck her even if the condoms loose
Ima fuck her even if she doesnt want me to
Listening to any one of decimals lines
Is like getting punched in the head several times
And u think u can listen to my whole discography?
I got struck by lightning 7 times and still didnt win the lottery

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Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 9th, '14, 18:19

Lol the thread got posted before i finished writng the title , be back with a link of feed too
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Postby Francesco » Jan 9th, '14, 19:25

It's aight... :y: Keep 'em coming. Different subject matters wise from what I've been reading here as of late too.
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Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '14, 21:07

It's decent similar to my random material I disliked the drake line but I'm just not a fan lol

Otherwise it flowed alright and was actually pretty cool just try to expand vocabulary to extend your multis

Are u really Asian lol I didn't know that ?
Maybe we could collab sometime soon :y:
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Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 9th, '14, 21:30

Naw i think you missed the point ofthat line lol but for.sure we can do something homie


Thanks for.the.feed
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Postby Francesco » Jan 10th, '14, 02:35

Menzo wrote:Dope. It's always fun reading your piece and looking at your avatar, lol it makes them so much better for some reason.
Nice flow, some pretty good punchlines but maybe it's a bit of a bias but the spinal cord/dinosaur just reminds me too much of Eminem's "Drug Ballad" lol but I understand he opens up different avenues for rhyming. It's all good :y:
Would like to see some different subject matter though, you got the gritty cypher rap down.


Yeah It was nice to see something a bit more street for a change & it felt like that ODB avatar kind of added to it. :y:
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