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just a verse

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 13th, '14, 00:05

People tell me to lighten up
But i cant do that unless im lightin' up
Man ill put you in such an early grave
Theyll be surprised to see you at the pearly gates
Make a mill and get me some time off
Cuz crime doesnt pay unless youre working for my boss
If its an eye for an eye youre a cyclops
If your future is bright ill be the one to turn the lights off
Hes #1 while im second in command
Fuck the cards u were dealt, the deck is in my hands
& theyd be calling me a wannabe addict
Cuz im not addicted but im constantly at it
Grew up on eminem and south park too
It doesnt exactly take a genius to outsmart you
& that album of yours is far from hip hop
You could give us a discount and we'd still feel ripped off

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Re: just a verse

Postby shadyblogger » Jan 13th, '14, 00:49

That was pretty good.

You seem to have a natural flow or rhythm when you put your words together. Felt quite natural and also the lyrics were nice as well.
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Re: just a verse

Postby Brainless BadGuy » Jan 13th, '14, 14:51

Dope :y:
Q. What did Eminem say to 50 when he caught him wearing a sweater?
A. GEE YOU KNITT??

I ain't no fucking G, I'm a cannibal
I ain't tryin to shoot you, I'm tryin to chop you into pieces and eat you
Wrap you in rope and plastic, stab you with broken glass
And have you with open gashes strapped to a soakin mattress
Coke and acid, black magic, cloaks and daggers
Fuck the planet, 'til it spins on a broken axis
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Re: just a verse

Postby Francesco » Jan 14th, '14, 16:31

Nice drop my dude... :y:
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Re: just a verse

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 15th, '14, 03:21

Thanks yall
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