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My sell-out song

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My sell-out song

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 17th, '14, 05:03

Verse 1
Kids aint the future , thats saved for me
I might not be the best but ill claim to be
Used to be homeless yeah i lost my home
But that didnt stop me from making a knock knock Joke
"That motherfuckers high on an ounce of shrooms,
Yet he claims he cant buy an ounce of food?"
Now everybodys drinking mountain Dew
And i know im rich but i cant even count to 2
Isnt everything so wonderful?
If im lying, may god strike me down with a thunderbolt
Spit every line like im under oath
Im a juggalo, yup i juggle hoes
Running unnopposed and i only won by a couple votes

Chorus
Its thanks to u , for all the lines i sniff
I made this for you, so come buy my shit
Dewey puts in work like tiny tim
I made this for you, so come buy my shit
aint no doctor prescribed these vitamins
I made this for u, so come buy my shit

Verse 2
Aint got a clock but i know what time it Is
Live a life of sin, dewey decimal but idk where the bible is


Bout to go cop a link of feed , Just scribbled this song down on my desk... both verses are umfinshed and will probably stay that way

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Re: My sell-out song

Postby shadyblogger » Jan 17th, '14, 05:15

Good stuff

I like your rhymes and your flow you got. The content is neat too.
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Re: My sell-out song

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jan 17th, '14, 05:21

Thanks my brotha
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Re: My sell-out song

Postby Francesco » Jan 18th, '14, 15:58

That's a good one too homie... :y: Keep it up.
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Re: My sell-out song

Postby Just Silver » Feb 3rd, '14, 02:07

Pretty solid sorta like my style drug wise lol

I liked it besides the knock knock line

It had an easy flow it'd be nIce to see verse 2
Chorus was decent
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