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CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 14th, '14, 21:03

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DwxufjtN8lE
LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=169463#p2580045
Everyone is all over the place with the amount of bars and shit. YOLO LEL
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[CanadaPure]
This isn't your typicle cypher verse, no, it's five times worse,
I write these words like a dieter who's so hungry I might burst,
I'm the first, I'll set the pace for the others' reckless ways,
The set-list plays, people vibing out but didn't checked the stage,
The band's been dead for days, now every night's open mic,
I'm in line hoping like, shit, I hope that my flow is nice,
But when I go to write Im frozen like I just can't do it,
And through it I've lost my focus like I'm just damn stupid,
Man, screw it, I'm here to kick it off for my comrades,
Think of that type of shit that's wicked awesome, I want that,
Spinnin' off 'cause I've gone mad, fuck following a topic,
I'd rather dress gothic and then go wallow in the mosh pit,
Follow me, I'm godless, just release your inhibitions,
Paper sheets are in position to unleash your inner vision,
At least I'm interestin', a verse should be worth one's while,
First one's wild, but the rest is more like 'Girls Gone Mild',


[Shadyblogger]
Was given the chance to participate in a cypher
When I'm done here y'all gonna need to change your diapers
Cuz I'm finna leave a streak and my ass is hyper
I might just jump in your car and stab you with the windshield wiper
And this rap is mostly off the dome
So if you say it sucks, I suggest you go home
Can't think of what to say, maybe I'll diss people with Down Syndrome
Or make fun of people with rabies and their mouths always full of foam
Cuz I ain't a nice person just so you know
I walk up to girls on the street just to ask them "you blow"?
Cuz if they don't, I'll bomb their apartment till they have to find a new home
Meanwhile I sit in my room practicing some Judo
Cuz I wanna be skillful with weapons and my bare hands
So illful that I can take any girl and do a square dance
But if I dance with you, you better not wear pants
Cuz we'll fuck while we dance but as far as eating your pussy, that's a rare chance


[Bigray]
I’m a psychopath, I stomped Michael Myers ass
Never lost a match, gimme my tools….rifle and mask
CP asked to collab but instead the competition collapsed
I glanced and laughed, threw a lit match in the gas……that
I planted right before I spat this track
And of course I puffed on a fat piff called crack
Green crack, not that shit like coke and smack
You mad? Well you’re a bitch like hoe’s I trash


[InsaneTRex]
My teacher was boring me, I got up and flipped him off
My mind's more chaotic than change in a synagogue
I'll finish off a liquor bottle and bacon, burst in a mosque
And rip hijabs off the women, go to the men and hit their jaws
Put on a pentagram necklace then run in a Christian mob
The leader told me "my son, either repent or damned
Ye shall be" and reached out and touched my shoulder with his hand
I thought for a second, then yelled "HAIL SATAN!" and kicked his balls
It's no wonder why I don't have any friends
I've done many sins, shit, a minute ago I stole under-
Wear from the ladies' section, nobody paid attention
Nobody notices me! Not even my own mother!
But fuck having friends when I can drink a whole Southern
Comfort bottle in an alleyway next to an old dumpster
And once I'm done with that, I'll puke stomach acid then fucking smash
The fifth and crush the glass beneath my sole, rubber's
Peeling off but I don't care because I can't walk straight
But I walk straight to the middle of the road and fall, eight
Cars all break, turn into the divider wall, grate
Against it but the only thing I care about is how bad my balls ache
I try to get back on my feet, but I can't relax my mind
So I act asinine, I foll on my fucking back then slide
To the side then bust my ass for nine hours till I go in a building
And sit down, I managed to make it to my class on time


[Rolly]
[Painus]
[Rollnus]
In for another takeover, like motherfucking Jay-Hova bitches
This is it game over, bout to cross a few names off our hit-list
Shit why not start with Silver, Dude was conceived at a Lyndons
How convenient, mommy shoulda bought some plan b's 'fore having a minion
Bitch probably did it on Valentines day, right there on the floor of the store
I'd love to torment a whore like Calandre, slash deep gashes with thorns from a rose
Damn I know her, yeah that bitch is bi-polar breh, can't you tell?
Yeah that chick is a devil, making earth feel like a brand new hell
What about Snake, that sliming slithering riddled Asian cunt can't count to 32
Yeah, it's just confusing dude, he's got usernames that are ironic and dirty too
Word, Snakebeast? you know he ain't packing, just lacking it's meant to say least
What a cheat, agreed, that shits as lame and gay as flagging babies
But yo would you feel bad if that guy horsebot got fucked with a horse cock?
Of course not, look at the source man, he's all about horsefam, feeling remorse? Not
Hey and rauL, remember that snitch? yeah lets go on and dismember that bitch
He never has kissed a chick in his life, he's probably gay like Adam and Mitch
So what up bitches, a big fuck you to everyone we just slayed son
And shout out to 12's return, and farewell and best wishes to our homie Aone


[Snake]
I had just turned sixteen when I decided to spit sixteens
Firing wit from my rhyme pistol from side of my hip,
But I’ve to admit that even though I can spit, society
Will probably never expect or respect this Goliath, you see
So bring on your King Davids and your blessed sticks and your stones
I’ll burn you with Satan’s powers, grab your flesh and rip it from bone
And be afraid, cause each of your families are the next ones to go
And don’t pray, because after I’m done, there’ll be no heaven to roam
Be warned, all of you sinners, as I pull this pen from the soul
And fill it with the blood of men that attempted to pay their debts with gold
Who were all sent to hell, where sinners each go to get burned
But hell is also my home, and so their screams echo in my words
I then ignite the ink with the rage in my eyes that just burns inside
Put the pen on the page and I release the anger that internalized
In my mind and body once, but now I channel it through this pen
Apply it to my enemies, and then watch as each of their lives just end

[Silver]
Lyndons. . Not quite convenient walk miles a day my blister is bleeding
The weed fiend needs tobacco leaves with it
that's me and half the district as we split it
Down the middle of the cold streets play a cello
A few miles just for a cigarillo so my lungs say hello
Im young and mellow sorta timid one mile left im finished
Under the bridge again with some cold sweats
Sweatpants a damn mess with pjs under that
Both soaked as I walk by a roadkill cat
Mental control I lack my mind wanders off
Thinkin about my life decisions boy I was wrong
Rappin in my head as I bring you this song
Maybe we can both go to lyndons ya I'll bring ya along
A swisher sweet or a backwood three miles they're that good?
Pretty much when you've got nothing else ill say it's understood
And I place my drugs all up in the top shelf like a common crook


[CanadaPure]
My last verse was gay as fuck, I wanna do some crazy shit too...

Watching cartoons, then I randomly punched my little brother,
Knocked out the little fucker, took an acid tab and slipped it under,
His fucking tongue, now he's young and dumb, kid's trippin' balls,
He runs, slips and falls, hit the wall, probably wont live at all,
He's only six, but I'll try to hide the corpse in my dad's Ford,
Grab my passport, hit the gas, floor it, four minutes pass 'for,
They're formin' a task-force, my fucking gas tank is on empty,
They swarm in and ask for him, this is the last place you can catch me,
I slammed breaks and I guess we crashed, something just went "thump",
It's my brother in the trunk, I guess he wasn't dead enough,
Peel my forhead off the dashboard, Unlocked the back doors,
Crawled and grab for the door handle, I saw the task force,
So I sprawled on the floor, my little brother wont stop crying,
Why isn't he dead? The plots winding down, hear the cops trying,
To hit me, their shots flying, looks like these times are dire,
Imma die for nothing, and I just wanted to write a cypher,

Fucking rediculous.
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby Just Silver » Feb 14th, '14, 21:17

I liked the rolly/pain piece
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby DetroitSkills » Feb 14th, '14, 23:37

this was fuckin dope tbh, nice yall :worship: dat rollnus joint tho...
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby Just Silver » Feb 15th, '14, 05:01

Ya beginning of trexs was shaky but that flow on to the next line stuff was real nice especially towards the end

My verse was meant to be a seperate piece but I used it here lol
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby shadyblogger » Feb 15th, '14, 05:01

Whew some good shit. Particular the Rolly and Pain verse. Whew
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby mdemaz » Feb 15th, '14, 07:44

OMG DOPE AF LOL
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby Just Silver » Feb 15th, '14, 13:34

Another in the near future?
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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 17th, '14, 00:27

Whew, lots to take in. This'll be a minute haha.

CP verse 1:

This was really dope. The lines about the band being dead on stage flowed so well. I have no complaints about this verse honestly. Thought the ending lines of the verse were pretty clever, kinda set the stage for everyone else to underperform in comparison to yours without explicitly saying it. Dope stuff.

Shadyblogger:
Eh, I wasn't feeling this one a lot. I know the shock aspect is pretty common for cyphers, but I don't think you really did it as well as you could've. Rhyming was okay, nothing really too impressive but a couple solid rhymes in there. IDK, it just doesn't really stick out much. Keep at it man.

Bigray:
I like your little part, it flows really well. I've been toying with the Michael Myers/psycho/cypher scheme for a while but could never really find a place for it, so I liked seeing you take that on. Not too much to say, it was a pretty small verse haha.

Rex:
My standout verse from the cypher. Really loved your phrasing, and the rhyme placement was awesome. I love toying with schemes like you did on this one. You kinda use one scheme for a while, then kick it to the side for an elongated internal rhyme until the initial scheme reappears to cap the bar/train of thought. There were some parts in the middle where the verse kinda lost some steam for me, but it picked back up at the end. Good stuff yo.

Rollnus:
I like the name haha. Verse was pretty good based off content alone. Nothing like stirring the pot a bit. I couldn't really find the flow, the bars were pretty damn long haha. Some pretty slick references in there, you both did a good job working things in without making it seem strained.

Snake:
My sleeper pick, in a good way, for this cypher. Didn't expect such heat whew. The first bars have some interesting schemes, you used them really well. Flowed pretty damn well too. The part about paying for their debt with gold was sick tbh, the standout of the verse. I really liked this one.

Silver:
Another usual crazy verse. You've probably got the weirdest schemes/writing style on the board haha. It works most of the time though, really helps to set you apart from a lot of other writers. You're also pretty damn good with imagery, which is definitely a strong suit for you.

CP verse 2:
Well that escalated quickly. I like this second verse, maybe not quite as much as the first though. The mentioning of your brother being nearly dead and you acting as if he was only to find him alive was pretty clever though. Liked the ending too haha. I think it coulda been built up a tad more, but it was still a pretty interesting way to end it.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: CW Fucking Rediculous Cypher - 8 Peoples

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 17th, '14, 23:05

DGAF with that god-tier feed tho
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