by RadishRun » Mar 8th, '14, 18:05
I've only read some of your works, Silver, but in my opinion, this one is towards the bottom of the list. Seemed like you were forcing rhymes/punchlines like the Fischer Price/Hasbro lines. On the other hand I think your rhyme placement can be dope, I really liked the few beginning lines, wish you kept the scheme going longer. Lastly, was hard for me to keep a flow going in my head (even while listening to the beat) but honestly that's most likely because I'm bad at it.
EDIT Just listened to it over the actual (non instrumental) song and it made a lot more sense. Words and flow match up much better than I originally thought. Keep up the good work man.
However.. no matter how bad I may be, I always seem to notice CP's flow. This is probably kinda risky to say since we're currently in a battle tournament together, but damn man your flow and structure is fucking awesome. It's like I know exactly how you intended to rap the piece, which makes it so much more enjoyable. That airplane line was fire to me.. honestly the whole thing was. Good job man, wish you posted stuff more often.
Overall nice job guys.
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RadishRun on Mar 8th, '14, 18:20, edited 1 time in total.
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