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Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 21st, '14, 01:54

Posting this on behalf of silver (as he is on mobile), who has been sitting on his verse for a while. I filled in and I told him I'd write a quick 16 bars and post it. Everything was thrown together really fast, so no real hook or anything.

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=169664#p2589921
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P61Hb0AIMp8
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It's the straight soma soldier relaxed in composure
My track stay fat like an ass in some yogas
I took me a soma with no coma spittin shit rough like skin on a cobra
Bullets point blank will fill your whole mandible
Up shits creek with Swiss cheese canoes
You have no "clue" like a bankrupt Hasbro
And when I get tanked gasoline for you Assholes...
I'm a motherfuckin uppercut ya
Cut ya in the stomach .. you lose supper with discomfort
Just a plate where your head be
My lines complex above your necks like frisbees. (Over your head)
I burns like Waylon Smithers fuzzy green caterpillars
Matter fact cocoon size moon high off a swisher
Catch my line like fishers? If not your mind is just price of a fisher (fisher price/toddler)
Backwards ass rappers shitting while im pissin
It's forsaken the floor shaking heavily
Bass turned up while I pop another magic bean
They don't know jack but I hope they stay safe.


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I'm not a drug addict, I'm more like a pyromaniac,
There's two sides to every story and I'm more like the crazy half,
Catch a glimpse of that shit? Doing lines off of strippers asses,
I'm like an airplane that barely flies off the strip, then crashes,
I have the vicious raps that leave you feeling like you're burnin' up,
I'd heard enough when your bitch said I was like the third to fuck,
That night, I wont hurt the slut, but tell her ass one thing for me,
She's only got tits because that bitch is as fat as King Gordy,
Yeah, sing porky, outta my mind with the sound off my rhyme,
Would have used lines that made sense if I had found 'em in time,
Bound to rewind... I'm not a drug addict, I'm a mental patient,
Who was sent to space in 2006, locked in these metal cages,
Wait, just what the fuck am I saying? Silver must be contagious,
This is fun for all ages, but if you're a cunt you gon' hate it,
My lines are about as complex as a white piece of paper,
With no words... actually gimme it, I might read it later.
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Feb 21st, '14, 02:06

Well, that was interesting.

SIlver, your verse started alright then it got a bit confusing, but that's probably cuz I'm not really reading much into, feeling too lazy to try to decipher anything. Reminds of something current Wayne would write.

YOu need to improve your rhyming though man, like I'm not trying to be a dick or anything but you've been getting worse with the rhymes at an alarming rate. I don't know if something you're taking is deteriorating your thought process or anything but yeah just a heads up you need to get that together.

CP, pretty funny lines. Particularly the Gordy line. Rhyming was tight and all. A bunch of randomness, but that seems to be the concept or whatever so good job.
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 21st, '14, 02:08

PAINKILLƎR wrote:CP, pretty funny lines. Particularly the Gordy line. Rhyming was tight and all. A bunch of randomness, but that seems to be the concept or whatever so good job.


I didn't know if there was a concept, so I went the Slaughterhouse route. :boxing:
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Feb 21st, '14, 02:09

CanadaPure wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:CP, pretty funny lines. Particularly the Gordy line. Rhyming was tight and all. A bunch of randomness, but that seems to be the concept or whatever so good job.


I didn't know if there was a concept, so I went the Slaughterhouse route. :boxing:

I'm just glad you didn't take the present Royce Da 5'9 route brother.
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 21st, '14, 02:11

PAINKILLƎR wrote:I'm just glad you didn't take the present Royce Da 5'9 route brother.


YOU ARE SURVIVING THE EVOLUTION OF RYAN,
IMMA BE A RICH NIGGA AND WASTE THE LAST BAR CRYIN'... You Ready?
WAAAAAHHHHH-AAHHHHHH-AHHHHHH-AHHH
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Feb 21st, '14, 02:18

CanadaPure wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:I'm just glad you didn't take the present Royce Da 5'9 route brother.


YOU ARE SURVIVING THE EVOLUTION OF RYAN,
IMMA BE A RICH NIGGA AND WASTE THE LAST BAR CRYIN'... You Ready?
WAAAAAHHHHH-AAHHHHHH-AHHHHHH-AHHH

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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '14, 02:20

Thanks guy I strictly based my verse around danny browns verse
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Eedee » Feb 21st, '14, 06:03

Yo this was pretty good.

CP I loved your lines
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 21st, '14, 06:04

Eedee wrote:Yo this was pretty good.

CP I loved your lines


Thanks babe
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Eedee » Feb 21st, '14, 06:10

CanadaPure wrote:
Eedee wrote:Yo this was pretty good.

CP I loved your lines


Thanks babe


Now do me
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby DetroitSkills » Feb 21st, '14, 09:58

CanadaPure wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:CP, pretty funny lines. Particularly the Gordy line. Rhyming was tight and all. A bunch of randomness, but that seems to be the concept or whatever so good job.


I didn't know if there was a concept, so I went the Slaughterhouse route. :boxing:

:laughing:
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '14, 13:00

Damn Lol thought more people knew the actual song :(
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 22nd, '14, 00:07

Whew. IDK man, I gotta say I actually really liked your verse Silver. I thought the rhyming was a step up from a lot of your previous efforts. Some pretty dope rhymes in there; I like the way you kind of abandon a scheme and start a new one internally and just continue that on. Plus I liked the punches, haven't really seen you take that route before but it worked for me. Only complaint is I felt the verse ended really abruptly.

CP's verse was dope haha, I was curious as to what I was reading until I saw the part about Silver rubbing off on you. The lines themselves were pretty fucking funny. You've got a pretty clever writing style, it reminds me to an extent of early Em type stuff. Very graphic in terms of imagery with a decent bit of humor.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '14, 00:28

Thanks guy and yea my ending did suck now that I look back lol
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby shadyblogger » Feb 22nd, '14, 01:38

Nice stuff guys
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