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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 27th, '06, 00:07

did this on zombieland gong at someone named EMINEM hahaha
all of this was a keystyle
here's his last verse

i'm comin' off that crack smokin' shit/
flippin' my click up doing lickety split/
lickety dick up clickety spit shit up/
bringin' intense heat spittin' fuckin' quik/
quittin' my clicka i just fuckin' lit up/
ringa so chinga ya mothafuckin' bitch fuck/



and i felt like responding so heres mine:

oh god...
ill try something like EMINEM..sort of

it ak wick clack dip crack nick nack/
get back, you're shits whack, its trash/
i slash and bash you're ass so fast/
a rash will spread you'll crash, you're dead/
you may stash the lead but i'll still smash your head/
blast the red, past the shed, this is the last you read/
should i say good bye? would i? could i?/
oh my your a ho guy im so fly you're so bi/
go die, go cry, try to flow my lines, they're so high/
you're low i suppossed, am i oppossed to you?/
what arose in you? nothing you suck, go fuck a duck/
get stuck in muck, glock block ill pluck your feathers/
crock you're dethers for heathers wife a lesbo/
you said flow but cant i can you're pants are fem-/
inime, like you with your name eminem, well im better than/
that cause he's fat and im slim no not hi. you got tims?
as in timberlands? what about spinnin rims? or a raido/
you're a lady yo a shady ho, groupie ri=ding a hooptie/
shoot me with a verse, whooptie thee i cursed you/
i'll verse you i bet i win, ill face him and lace him up/
place him up in outerspace, you're sniffing powder flakes/
you powder face, you like to suck on trouser snakes/
wowzers shakes, im done keystyling, which is typing freestyling/
me filing down the disses? you got beter luck trying to drown the fishes/
you're a clown, im vicious and dont care, are you offended?/
will you be defended by yourself? contended by your health?/
surrendered my own self never ill never surrender/
im the top contender you flop ill bend ya/
send ya to hell and back, you fell off track/
im still well on tact while you swell on crack/
oh hell im back on a fire inside, this is your dire demise/
you're crying inside, i know it , try to come back, you'll blow it/
like you blow dick you ho bitch, you're shits wrong/
my shits strong this is a quick song..now lets see you res-pond/

:laughing:
any thoughts?
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Postby Coccoa » Jul 27th, '06, 00:10

Why u had to hurt him so much?
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 27th, '06, 00:15

Coccoa wrote:Why u had to hurt him so much?


eh it shouldnt really hurt him. i did it as a joke really. i was in a writing mood but oculdnt write for the subject i have to write for so i went there and he posted last so umm thats why its towards him :unsure:
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Postby Coccoa » Jul 27th, '06, 00:16

ThomasAguanis wrote:
Coccoa wrote:Why u had to hurt him so much?


eh it shouldnt really hurt him. i did it as a joke really. i was in a writing mood but oculdnt write for the subject i have to write for so i went there and he posted last so umm thats why its towards him :unsure:


Save ur writing mood for some Bloodline 2 bullshit.

And go have a haircut man, u scaring me. I told u 100 times.
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 27th, '06, 00:21

Coccoa wrote:Save ur writing mood for some Bloodline 2 bullshit.

And go have a haircut man, u scaring me. I told u 100 times.


well this was all onscence rhymes really but for bloodline 2 it'll be better.

and what are you talking about me getting a haircut? :confusion:
it's not me in the avy if you didnt know
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Postby Coccoa » Jul 27th, '06, 00:22

Who's the weirdo then??? Damn man...my hand is shaking i cant even shoot him, he's like a nitemare.
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 27th, '06, 00:24

Coccoa wrote:Who's the weirdo then??? Damn man...my hand is shaking i cant even shoot him, he's like a nitemare.


fuckin a...
its my girlfriend
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Postby Coccoa » Jul 27th, '06, 00:30

:confusion:

*chokes*

Handsome female.
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Postby katastrophe » Jul 27th, '06, 01:47

nice...i really like it
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^^^Propz to McMaybe :worship:
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 27th, '06, 02:05

Coccoa wrote::confusion:

*chokes*

Handsome female.

:fuming: :swear:


and thanks katastrophe
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Postby Mr. Cookie » Jul 27th, '06, 02:09

I read it at zland...good... :smoking:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 29th, '06, 16:48

he got owned man great work thomas
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 29th, '06, 17:36

thanks for the feed guys :worship:
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Postby stevethetruth » Jul 29th, '06, 18:06

damn that was wicked good you flat out killed him
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