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Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

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Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 16th, '14, 18:03

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(Chorus)
What am I to do, where am I to go
I need something spiritual
If you try to bring me down just to get high
Quite the reciprocal
I just need to keep on goin. . Keep on goin
Goin.. just gotta keep on...

Anywhere in life some asshole has that last word
Just make sure your on track and have some strong nerves
And always be true to yourself no gluing yourself
Copying might just end up ruining wealth
And not only that but your own self worth
It makes me feel like shit how I don't work
If my hobby was a job I'd be hyped as fuck
I'd be gassed with ideas of cyphering stuff
Most people lose train of thought blocked in a box
I trained myself to write and get out of the dark
The right measures with pot I'll boil right up to the top
No more advice taken literally from hateful faggots
If I do that my life could be as a handgun has been
Bang bang life thrown away in a trash bin just cause of a comment

(Chorus)

But it's not gonna end like that we all should be
Tougher and could be. . In comfort
Something above the haters high as aviators
Style with the pens persuasion
Talking to my audience grace saving
Wrist saved from the razor blading
All because of ignorant bitter hatred hat red
From the last bit of lead
When the last faggot said some troll shit
But act as if it's a park you stroll in
Just an everyday occurrence it ain't worth it
I know I'm preaching to the choir but I'm singing the lyrics
And the shit emotionally touches them through the ending
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Atone » Mar 16th, '14, 20:59

deep,

that lasst line in the 1st part could of went like "Won't let a comment cause me to throw my life in the trash been"

that part was the only part that didn't seem to fit, the rest went smooth, feels as if this was written after somebody said somethin negative to you as well, maybe somebody on here or somethin, idk, i havn't really paid attention to who's fightin who on this site anymore

either way, this is pretty good
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 16th, '14, 21:01

thanks guy and ya has been and trash bin sorta rhyme so i flowed in a way i saw fitting

great feed btw :y:

ya ppl have been dicks lately
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 17th, '14, 17:58

Bump
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 19th, '14, 16:01

Last bump then new project
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 24th, '14, 15:43

Real final bump barely any feed

Topical coming soon ish
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Mike Wrecka » May 24th, '14, 15:01

ok cool stuff here.

but ya constructively try to keep a rhyme string going longer. it seems that you just use a rhyme string in two lines than go to the next. try to go six or eight lines with the same multi


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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » May 25th, '14, 17:18

i dont like sticking with multis it doesnt seem natural to me

but thanks guy
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Just Silver » Jul 20th, '14, 01:14

Last bump new project
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby cement » Jul 20th, '14, 01:16

bumperty bumperette
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R.I.P. to my homeboy £I£BuffDa[OG], we done lost you on the streets but you aint forgotten hombre.
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Re: Rhino Skinned syllables/ keep on goin

Postby Supershade » Jul 20th, '14, 02:24

cement wrote:bumperty bumperette

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Cause I can’t explain to y’all how dang exhausted my legs felt, just having to balance my dang self but on eggshells I was made to walk but thank you, ma, ‘cause that gave me the strength to cause Shady-mania
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