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Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Just Silver » May 6th, '14, 03:31

Thanks guys :y:
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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Sobecaspur » May 6th, '14, 03:37

I was gonna tell this guy,
how wrong he was about your flow.
Irregardless of rhyming and words.
Not every line has to work.
Your syllables still skipped it up....
sobe from kc,
justly hyped forum is Right .
My memories of to be or not to be .
RAH started out and ended in our names, time only tells beauty standing still .
Hard to reach on my own private world alone, one Cinderella shoe that needed to fall.
Fathers the orange he bounced us around often, might as well been thrown out of the window like your mom was talking.
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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Just Silver » May 6th, '14, 03:39

Eh idk if that's bad or not to be honest

I loved this piece
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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Just Silver » May 6th, '14, 03:52

Menzo wrote:Sorry, I don't really know what to add.

This is probably the best structured verse I've seen from you though, Silver.

Thanks guy

Commas work wonders lol
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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Excita » May 6th, '14, 15:36

Silver went mad on this. :y:
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Re: Mat Demaz & Just Silver- Halo

Postby Just Silver » May 6th, '14, 15:38

Thanks guy
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