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New Song 1st Verse (Lyrics)

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New Song 1st Verse (Lyrics)

Postby OfficialZep » Jun 6th, '14, 23:36

Warning This is a heads up this
sh;t gonna blow up in your mind with a head rush
You rap so nervous you face , swells up like red blush
You say im sick , with a stomach made up of only mush
Speaking out to familys who dont leave a child to cuss
I've been called evil deciveing to greetful
got somthing to say ? okay il give you a mouthful
you feeling doubtful ? okay il kick you to the south pole
a night owl who's imprisoned but got out
with a bottle of gasoline to burn your whole town down
Im either John Orr or Ray Lee Oyler either way im an
Arsonist but still kick down your front door
il scorch your front porch and sneak in the back door
Im hot enough for when i walk i light the floor boards
but cold enough to bring hell on all 4's
So now give applause what i havnt said F*ck get off your menopause
Shoots up in the air and brings down Santa Clause
Fails School but still bright and even puts up a goo fight
even though i lost both limbs and dont know how i write
a bike ride that goes off a dangerous height keeps impaled by a spinning spike
Where a mask and pull off Magnificent heights to make a nice diam
now get the f*ck out because these bombs are timed !
Lose yourself in this music, this moment we own it
We won't never let it go (go), you better move yourself
Because tomorrow's ass can wait
There is no time, to sit there and procrastinate


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Re: New Song 1st Verse (Lyrics)

Postby Arabian Shady » Jun 17th, '14, 10:56

Hey Bro
I dig the verse. Concept seems hazy. I mean it sounds more of a freestyle rather than a full song?
Structure seems off a bit as well. I had a little trouble flowing it as i read it aloud.
But i like your style. Keep it up! :)
ArAbIaN ShAdY


We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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