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Postby Just Silver » Jul 15th, '14, 22:20

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Waking up never, since I never fell asleep
Sellin them acid sheets, all throughout the week
That's only a piece, a third what have you
I got fingers for the smack dudes ,havem stuck like statues
Got molly for the club rats ,who would never fuck with that
And don't worry if you need more I got another batch
Ship through customs to customize the chemical
Dope so strong they be dying off the fentanyl
If they hear someone died then they wanna try
One at a time, as the fiends form a line and drop like flies
And snort a line , how is providing a service a crime
Signing when the package arrives, cursive then print
Then I dip, somewhere in my cabinet it sits before it's whipped
Add in the lactose so it looks like a fat dose, gloves and labcoats
Make the product safer, but they come back ,so have hope in the situation
Bits of paper making, like a shredder and shit you think you're better than this?
You'll end in a ditch if you end up fucking with the kid
Much more than a threat, raped if the opposite sex
Stop your steps, think before you text
All we need is a transaction , just come and leave
I got the drugs you need but these aren't coming cheap
Here's the prices about 100 a g for dope
About 80 for the molly dose a g ya know
For a tab of acid it's the cheapest ,10 through all seasons
And the more they buy ill sell it for cheaper
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 15th, '14, 22:30

Nice piece man. I really enjoyed the flow and the rhymes. The lyrics were neat too. One of your better ones imo.
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Just Silver » Jul 15th, '14, 22:33

Thanks guy Usually my non fiction pieces are perceived better
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Postby shadyblogger » Jul 15th, '14, 22:39

Just Silver wrote:Thanks guy Usually my non fiction pieces are perceived better


Yes :y:
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Just Silver » Jul 15th, '14, 22:51

Thanks for the feed guys
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby mdemaz » Jul 16th, '14, 01:30

this makes me wanna relapse
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Postby Just Silver » Jul 16th, '14, 01:32

Thanx guy we should together
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Postby Just Silver » Jul 16th, '14, 17:55

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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Solace » Jul 16th, '14, 18:29

This section might as well be called "Just Silver's Writing", jesus. Well, I enjoyed this. I seldom read your work (obviously) but you've clearly improved and there's no doubt that that's because you constantly write. I think it's a bit useless to give you feedback like, "Tighten up your schemes" for example, because I've noticed that what you might lack in one piece you'll make up for in another. If there's an issue at all, there's an issue of consistency. You clearly grasp generally everything, but I don't think you demonstrate your skill as well as it deserves in each and every piece. Does that make sense?

On the other hand, there are some parts where I think some explanation is due. What does this mean, "I got fingers for the smack dudes"? Or this, "Much more than a threat, raped if the opposite sex, stop your steps, think before you text"?
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Just Silver » Jul 16th, '14, 18:34

Solace wrote:This section might as well be called "Just Silver's Writing", jesus. Well, I enjoyed this. I seldom read your work (obviously) but you've clearly improved and there's no doubt that that's because you constantly write. I think it's a bit useless to give you feedback like, "Tighten up your schemes" for example, because I've noticed that what you might lack in one piece you'll make up for in another. If there's an issue at all, there's an issue of consistency. You clearly grasp generally everything, but I don't think you demonstrate your skill as well as it deserves in each and every piece. Does that make sense?

On the other hand, there are some parts where I think some explanation is due. What does this mean, "I got fingers for the smack dudes"? Or this, "Much more than a threat, raped if the opposite sex, stop your steps, think before you text"?

Best feed thanks guy

Smack is heroin and a finger is 10 grams

And the raped if the opposite sex is just demonstrating how hardcore the drug game is if u fuck around
If its a girl giving me shit I'd rape her lol

And the stop your steps means just think about how u wanna make this transaction and don't fuck with me through txting
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Solace » Jul 16th, '14, 18:38

Fair enough, thanks for the explanations

Just Silver wrote: don't fuck with me through txting

I wouldn't dream of it man
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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Just Silver » Jul 16th, '14, 18:41

Solace wrote:Fair enough, thanks for the explanations

Just Silver wrote: don't fuck with me through txting

I wouldn't dream of it man

:laughing:

It was more of my connect since he's the one that has hitmen and shit
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Postby Just Silver » Jul 17th, '14, 12:58

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Re: mr.drugs

Postby Just Silver » Jul 18th, '14, 23:32

Last bump new project
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