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Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby mdemaz » Jul 23rd, '14, 07:03

that xzibit line ded
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Jul 23rd, '14, 07:33

dope Dope DOPE ish right here. Idk if you'd take this as a compliment, but it reminded me of 'Low, Down, & Dirty.' Would love to hear this recorded. It flowed very well.

And now for the bad: some lines fell flat and seemed kind of empty content-wise. But, it was a freestyle so it's expected. That PBS line made me exert air out my nose though; it was funny.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Eedee » Jul 23rd, '14, 07:45

Horse wrote:

I just caught Mister Wilson trying to violate Dennis


Horse is in your bitch's ear, I'm blowing up -- Wile E.
Twenty-first birthday, grew a pubic hair -- finally

This is what happens when you tell your kid he's useless
I'm down for equal rights, I'm just not out having gay sex

Ironic like when I slice a junkie with a straight edge
On that Pornhub shit, search for scissoring nymphos
My ride's a tricycle, dawg, can Xzibit pimp those?
Ran up on PBS and started cursing on kids' shows
Shit, I think I got disease in each one of my lymph nodes


These parts were my favorite :laughing:

You had some sick rhymes, flow was spot on (for me at least), and the content was fucking hilarious as shit. Definitely seems inspired by SSLP-era Em. :y:
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 23rd, '14, 17:29

Great piece Horse! Some really cool one liners in there and the way some of the lyrics just flowed into one another, it was like dopeness after dopeness. Keep it up :y:

Btw, have you had any ideas for our collab? I messaged you of an idea or so a little while back. It was just a thought. I really don't care. You could choose the topic.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Solace » Jul 23rd, '14, 17:30

Horse wrote:i rapped this for my mom

yikes
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 23rd, '14, 19:39

Sounds good Horse.

Btw about rapping this for your Mom... Does she like Eminem? That's crazy that she's into rap and all that sorta stuff, in a good way though. I can't even imagine introducing my Mom to Eminem or rapping a freestyle for her.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 23rd, '14, 19:47

Horse wrote:i wouldn't say she's "into" rap, but she does like Eminem. she's heard most of his albums and she bought her own copy of MMLP2, and she's capable of recognizing Jay-Z and Kendrick on the radio. she absolutely hates Iggy Azalea tho. i'm not allowed to listen to Fancy or Problem in her car because she thinks Iggy's voice is fucking annoying. :laughing:


Holy shit bro! That's awesome! My Mom can't stand rap and barely even gives it a chance.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Flamez » Jul 24th, '14, 03:45

This was nice man I enjoyed reading this I think it's the first thing I read from you. Good shit though. haha
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby gutawafang » Jul 24th, '14, 06:26

Flow was very good because the syllables were consistent in each line. I loved the funny lines here. Nice punches and nameplays. Nice. :y:
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Solace » Jul 26th, '14, 09:29

Horse wrote: :laughing: eh, she's pretty chill. not the sort of person to be offended by this kind of stuff. she's heard Relapse, so she can handle it. what do you think of this piece btw?

It was more of a yikes @ sitting your mom down like "Here mom listen to my rappity rap!", I'm being a dick tho

It's a solid piece, the first couplet urks me though because it's by far the worst of the piece and just generally bad. Wouldn't be surprised if the cracker dick line inspired by Childish, lmao. If so, nice. I wouldn't want to look at this under a microscope because it's clearly meant for entertainment, but it's hard not to notice at times that you write at a much higher caliber than at other times. Clearly a condensed 16 in some shape or form of this would be great, so I'd probably expect that consistency from a more focused, less freeverse-y piece. But freeverses are just so much more fun to write. Nevertheless good job, you've kept CW alive that much more.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Just Silver » Jul 26th, '14, 14:52

This was pretty good lots of lines that were technical and even celebrity drops like bill oreilly and kapernik however u spell it lol

Was a very animated verse reminded me of cartoon Em

Really good shit It's just weird how you're so good with little TR practice

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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 26th, '14, 17:15

True Wiz wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Really good shit It's just weird how you're so good with little TR practice

That's what confused me as well lol


Yeah Horse was probably saving this one up. He's probably got 10 more verses that are just as good that he can whip out whenever somebody doubts him or questions his abilities.
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby sneakerheadshady » Sep 23rd, '14, 02:02

this is very very good. i like it a shit ton. the wordplay, complex rhymes, and references are on point. i might be imagining it but i can almost feel eminems influence in this. :y: good shitt
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Re: Headless Horseman - July Freewrite

Postby Halftongue Dre » Sep 25th, '14, 00:03

Life n death are in the power of words. I have the same struggle trying to tame the dark thiughts. Be you i guess though..
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