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Topsy Turvy

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jul 24th, '14, 15:10

Just some shit i scribbled down last night , Topsy Turvy is my alias


Dewey is a mastermind.
Dewey is the anti-christ
but im still going to heaven in my afterlife, afterlife
veronica and adeline
10k everytime i add a line
if the pen is a sword, then im a fuckin samorai
pirate in a frozen lake.
dont want no dickryders, go away
and find another rapper to overrate
dont know what im suppose to do
you want a rematch? now its 0 for 2
i aint really mad at ya
such is the way of Canada
This shit is Topsy Turvy
But sometimes you gotta walk the journey
the bitch dont wanna fuck, and my fuckin laundrys dirty

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Re: Topsy Turvy

Postby Dewey Decimal » Jul 24th, '14, 20:39

Thanks bro , havent been writing much but i wanna get back into it.


i spit this 1 kinda fast hah , more to come probably
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Re: Topsy Turvy

Postby Spyder » Jul 28th, '14, 06:33

best way to get back into it is a battle bro ;)

either way this was a decent little piece, flowed well and everything. as really short so i cant really go much more into it but good drop none-the-less. interest in seeing when you get completely back into it.
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Re: Topsy Turvy

Postby Just Silver » Oct 9th, '14, 23:29

Extremely short and hard to rate

But some of the imagery is Bronson like which I applaud

Otherwise it's way too short and some rhymes don't add up
Just work on your rhyming guy and I think you'll do pretty well

First opening lines didn't really grasp my attention and I find that to be most important
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Re: Topsy Turvy

Postby shadyblogger » Oct 10th, '14, 01:32

Nice flow and structure. Enjoyable to read
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