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Today's Rappers...

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Jul 25th, '14, 23:49

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=172678

Today's mainstream is nothing but wack rappers/
that need to be backpack-ers/
they need to be smacked backwards/
and catch flack for releasing crap in the same exact pattern/
as the last crackers/
who said that they pack Mack's or claimed that they have swagger/
you're not hard, just class actors/
and your verses just crack laughter/
that belong in a trash compactor/
"Got stacks? Well, my stack's fatter"/
please stop it--it's bad patter/
so stop with the flat chatter/
and jibber jabber 'fore you get Jack-Daggered/
in the spine by this back stabber/
messin' with me is a haphazard/
that'll lead you in a hole like the Mad Hatter/
but I'm just a phat cat stealing cheese from you rat bastards/
forget the children's books, I'll make your life skip to it's last chapter/
I'm out of this world! You're just the planet that's past Saturn/
on a fast track to becoming black matter/
got damn it, I've got this craft mastered/
cuz when I go in, I go like a man with a bad bladder/
when you go, we're left with nothing but crap after/
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Re: Today's Rappers...

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 26th, '14, 22:30

Nice man, you're clearly a good rhymer. A lot of the verses I've seen from you keep the same scheme for the majority of the verse if not the entire thing. The trash compactor bar kinda threw off the scheme a syllable but no bigge. The rat bastards/last chapter line was hot, wasn't feeling the haphazard line though. I get the play on words but meh. The out of this world/past Saturn line was nice as well haha, felt it coulda been executed a bit better in the set up but still pretty dope as is. Good stuff.
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Re: Today's Rappers...

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 26th, '14, 22:34

Nice rhyming as usual. Keep it up brah
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Re: Today's Rappers...

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Jul 27th, '14, 00:30

Thanks, Mr... lel yeah, not much of my stuff that I've been posting here, lately, is high on content or structure, really. I've just been messing around, seeing how many rhymes I can think of without getting off topic or sounding forced, which is why you're noticing the schemes that go on for entire pieces. Anyway, I appreciate your feedback. Will definitely take it into account when I record it.
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Re: Today's Rappers...

Postby shadyphantom91 » Jul 27th, '14, 01:26

I think this is dope man. It is well-structured and flows smoothly. My favorite lines are: who said that they pack Mack's or claimed they had swagger/You're not hard , just class actors and the jibber jabber for you get Jack-Daggered in the spine by this backstabber.
[b]I float like B.I.G.'s spirit in this bitch I'm ghostly
Rush me, cause you aint gonna live to roast me/b]
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Re: Today's Rappers...

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Jul 27th, '14, 21:35

shadyphantom91 wrote:I think this is dope man. It is well-structured and flows smoothly. My favorite lines are: who said that they pack Mack's or claimed they had swagger/You're not hard , just class actors and the jibber jabber for you get Jack-Daggered in the spine by this backstabber.


Thanks, man. Your post 'Rap' inspired me to construct and post this.
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