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concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Jul 28th, '14, 19:11

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My life is so similar to prison
Except for the food that's just sitting in the kitchen
And honestly most of its gone my spirit is strong
As my hunger prolongs, My writing logs are larger
So I just go on , thinking thoughts from marijuana
And I live in the woods nowhere to wander
No damn stores within the concretes heat walk farther
I feel beat and I never had a father, something that I ponder
Wish my life was different as I go onward
Through these hectic streets taking the best of me
My location, no patience, so im debating to be an accessory
Of a crime job, get the money and slide off
It's funny how it f's with me a failure in a recipe
Burnt out like a cookie , I just wanna win bets with a bookie
Wanna have skis and jets like a movie
But my world is as if hells grasp took me in
Sellin grass Just to make some ends to the end
Beginning to finish im sinning like im Carlin
Marlin flows or some fuckin cod shit they're full of nonsense
So I'm just gonna keep taking a loss
This can't be the way the world's gonna gone
When I can't have vital signs , I think it's about my time
I shout and cry inside about to pull a Columbine
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Jul 30th, '14, 18:41

Bump
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Sam. » Jul 30th, '14, 19:42

Decent verse. I read this with Buddens voice. You seriously need to step out of "Let's talk about me" Topics.
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Jul 31st, '14, 01:50

Sam. wrote:Decent verse. I read this with Buddens voice. You seriously need to step out of "Let's talk about me" Topics.

I know lol but that's what I heard ppl wanting to hear

Thanks for the feed tho :smoking:
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Re: concrete flames

Postby shadyblogger » Jul 31st, '14, 15:33

Nice work. Very solid and some interesting imagery.
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Jul 31st, '14, 15:37

Thanks guy
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Aug 5th, '14, 15:01

Last bump new project
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Just Silver » Aug 7th, '14, 23:55

Real last bump
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Re: concrete flames

Postby Supershade » Aug 8th, '14, 02:41

Bumpity bump bump last bump 4evs
Cause I can’t explain to y’all how dang exhausted my legs felt, just having to balance my dang self but on eggshells I was made to walk but thank you, ma, ‘cause that gave me the strength to cause Shady-mania
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