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7 Deadly Sins

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7 Deadly Sins

Postby Dirrt » Aug 2nd, '14, 12:07

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I’ve known and have known the untrusting subdued restrained and thriving to repent
That terminal torture of a twisted mind that denied and defied me
Believing betrayal beheld my heart
I don’t want anything
I don’t need anything
I don’t want to exist but I can’t resist
What suffers thru my veins
Cautious and creative my mind is
To break you down is my desire
You see, you can’t play the game
I created it
A mind fuck
You try... Why?
I will destroy and demolish any dignity you have left

The way I see it
I AM THE 7 DEADLY SINS

I am the one you take pride in
Seeing ourselves as we are
As not comparing ourselves to others
Is humility as someone else's pride bothers me
I have a lot of pride but I am the one who destroyed your pride

I am the attitude that fuels your wrath
But kindness is taking the tender approach
But you need the patience and the compassion for it too work
As anger is often our other reaction to the problem
Just like we should be
We are impatience

I am the wealth that made you greedy
Though generosity means letting others take the credit
But I am giving without making expectations of you
Greed is the more you want of me

I am the one you are envious off you have to be patient for it to be kind
It seeks the good in others though envy resents this is love

I am the one you lurk for
I am the one you hear others talk about
I am the one you dream off as I do the same for you
As I am the one you lust for it is all about self control
The mastery to prevent pleasure from killing by suffocation
I want the maximum efficiency but without damage
Sex, power and image is a self destructive for lust
It will spiral out of control

I am the food that fed your gluttony
Temperance accepts the limits of pleasures
A balance must be kept and you have to have faith

I am the drug that made you sloth
I am the one that powered you
You are the one that powered me through energetic commands

Our deadly sins will combine to unite us
When it touches our hearts we will combine as one

To hate me is what I wanted from you
To strengthen my person is what I gained from you
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Re: 7 Deadly Sins

Postby Francesco » Aug 2nd, '14, 12:25

I love the concept... :y: Very good overall actually.
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Re: 7 Deadly Sins

Postby Dirrt » Aug 2nd, '14, 12:40

Thanks

I wrote it in 2009, it's scatty, bad flow but it was generally getting words down and nothing more than that
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Re: 7 Deadly Sins

Postby Francesco » Aug 3rd, '14, 11:17

Dirrt wrote:Thanks
I wrote it in 2009, it's scatty, bad flow but it was generally getting words down and nothing more than that


Anytime... :y:
Keep 'em coming.
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Re: 7 Deadly Sins

Postby Just Silver » Aug 12th, '14, 16:22

Very well written but I got an eerie vibe from it but the subject fits

I really wanna see u start rapping

If you can write like this you'd be decent
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Re: 7 Deadly Sins

Postby Dirrt » Aug 12th, '14, 20:11

Thanks dude :)

I probably could if I put my mind to it, but my job can be draining, long hours, then fitting on pleasure - these good moments I do get are very rare

I tend to enjoy changing song lyrics to reflect me, not massive changes but its kinda therapeutic for me :happy:

What is life?
I'm tired of life
I'm tired of backstabbing ass snakes with friendly grins
I'm tired of them years on committing the same sins
Tired of still giving into this lotto that never wins
Tired of it never coming to a happy end
Tired of having skinny friends hooked on looks, being vein and thin
I'm tired of seeing that bitch use and go back and forth with a spin
Tired of having to just deal
Tired of having to deal with the bullshit without being allowed opinion and to feel
Tired of drowning in my sorrow
Tired of having to deal with her claiming pity in her self wallow
I'm tired of motherfuckers saying shit behind my back
I'm tired of them being blind but they can't see as they so far up her crack
then this bitch wanders why I'm smartin off
I'm tired of being judged every time I'm honest, but it's your fucking loss
Tired of having to work as a friend
No longer bothered about explaining or having to defend
They can't see anything other than their point of view
At least what I'm saying is honest and true
I'm tired of making the effort to show them I care
Tired of them all they've become too much to bear
Tired of not being a millionaire
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