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twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 12th, '14, 17:19

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Welcome to my creative cruel twisted brain
Poppin pills writing ,while people need em for pain
I was laughing at those planes that got shot down. . Fuck them
People think im such a nut well then why don't you suck them
Doin a buck ten in a Mercedes benz, in a school zone
Shootin school buses ,making necklaces out of their cool bones
Punchin pregnant bitches ,and burning down the group homes
Goin to AA meetings drinking down shots like free throws
You'll stay sober tellin stories while I drink about three more
Dark liquor light liquor, interracial beverages
Wanna see a gangbang with a black bitch cause I'm prejudice
Wanna see the whole damn thing with KKK edicate
Wearing the white dunce cap and if that bitch fights back
I'm gonna kill her whole family, and possibly the whole race
Buying slaves then reselling them on EBay
Have an Asian cunt lick my butt when im outta rolls
I'm here without a soul ,bloody soles but the watch is gold
Killem in style everyday will be a payday
Go back in time and finally kill Andrew mulcahey
Fuck that kill him now, five years later ,hope he had a baby
Because I'll strangle it with his own shitty pocket shirts
I'm sorry I think crazy I ain't no officer
If I had a shrink id probably rape and devour her
State to state I'm the challenger, lookin to make mayhem
Rape the state with so much cum it's like I've bathed them
Equipped with a bayonet and a mac 10
So I stay with a decision to make before I pass a peasant
Taking out Adams apples after I spill my seeds
Johnny appleseed of this rape shit It's basic
Just common thoughts from a fucked individual
Always been ridiculed , constructed these thoughts
The verdict is brought hip to my plot shot over lip
And throw you in a spot where an addict had lived
Or in the attic to live till you're 76
If you even live that long , I probably won't
In fact you won't either with just a water bowl
I'm an animal find me at the watering hole
My pupils swoll like the fatter hoes
By doing rolls that's molly for you imbeciles
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 13th, '14, 15:03

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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby mdemaz » Aug 13th, '14, 15:26

Bah, this is all over the place.

You need to write when you are fully sober, otherwise it's a mess.
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 13th, '14, 15:28

mdemaz wrote:Bah, this is all over the place.

You need to write when you are fully sober, otherwise it's a mess.

The last piece I was sober and it wasn't as good imo lol

This one's intentionally all over as well
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Postby Just Silver » Aug 14th, '14, 12:03

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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 15th, '14, 13:35

Last bump new project
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Spyder » Aug 15th, '14, 15:53

Hit me up for a collab again, bruv.
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 18th, '14, 01:10

Hell ya guy soon will do

Also bump..
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby shadyblogger » Aug 18th, '14, 02:27

Actually really liked this one. Like you said, it was all over the place but I could definitely tell that was intentional. A lot of the lines felt very SSLP/MMLPesque which was pretty cool. I know ppl want others to find their own style but you writing like Eminem was actually really dope and I think this piece proves that. Some great imagery and witty one-liners. The lyrics flowed pretty nicely for the most part too. I liked this one a lot :y:
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 18th, '14, 02:58

Thanks guy I need to write more
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Re: twisted thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '14, 13:30

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