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Black Thoughts

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Black Thoughts

Postby Strictt Ame » Aug 18th, '14, 04:00

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My deepest thoughts are dark as fuck, My inner martyr run a muck
My heart cares, but as for my mind, it dont give a fuck
Dunno how to switch it up, so I roll a swisher up
Get knocked down, im gettin up, fuck you, I aint givin up
The "A" stands for Anarchy, "M" stands for Me
"E" stands for eternity, thats how its meant to be
Until the day I rest in peace, my grind will never sleep
Bury me seven-feet, so I can fight the devils seed
Murder murder Lucifer, red rum in a shot glass
They make you pay attention, but its never bought back
The gimmicks sadistic, assisted by the position you live in
Different divisions, twistin your vision, if this is the ending
And Jesus arisen, its just the beginning
I summon my henchmen, gather my minions
March in the trenches, slaughter the millions
Take the darkest emotion and I target the feeling
What you thought I was an honest civilian
Who honored the written, laws of a pilgrim
Scripted against man from an armored pavilion
The dawn of our children, all gone in an instant
Black Thoughts..
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Re: Black Thoughts

Postby Just Silver » Aug 18th, '14, 16:23

Reminded me of one of my own pieces

Didn't care for the acronym breakdown but it wasn't too bad

Otherwise I've seen a lot better from you since I've seen your punches before and they kill this
Overall it was pretty decent but if you lengthened it it may have been much better
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Re: Black Thoughts

Postby Strictt Ame » Aug 20th, '14, 17:44

appreciate the feed, and yeh this wasnt a punch piece really
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