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Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '14, 02:58

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We're all living to die but I'm living a lie
No surprise, I should OD and crumble inside
If you know me , you should swallow your pride
Realize you can't help me and step aside
Step into my mind, everything is an excuse
Exclude the drug use and things that I do
Cause even without that shit my heads screwed loose
Meds got me confused, like what can I do
But doze off , I know I lost but I'm high walking it off
Walking blindfolded, my minds not open
Only time it will be is me bleeding in these streets
I'm just bitching at the beat, as if it's gonna answer
I'm itching for the drugs, and these jobs are like the cancer
They don't come easy, like virgin dicks
Jobs are hard to come by, bout to go and murder a bitch
Or rob her blind come back twice ,once she opens her eyes
And steal that cash again, goin to hell is a given
The life im living is Hell I'm not even pretending
Skeptical with this scalpel at my tendons
Like should I end it? If it wasn't for my girlfriend id probably slit it
Cut it , film it and end it... moving credits
I'm gonna just off myself now cause the internet said it
Suicide is easier than finding a career
Maybe I'll find god when this fucking gun appears
To my temple , find the indent with the barrel
Slowly move the trigger finger sweat drippin
Click from the ammunition finally found my life's mission
Finally dead. . Jesus take my soul even though I never believed. ..
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Re: Just Die Already

Postby shadyblogger » Aug 20th, '14, 03:14

Solid piece. Really liked the opening bars. Some nice one-liners and that virgin dicks line made me stop and read it over lol. Could tell it was personal and from the heart so that was good. The ending started to build up nicely but then fell flat on the last line. Overall, solid piece. Good work bro.
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Re: Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '14, 03:16

Thanks guy

Yea that last line was just me tryin to show the part where I'd believe in God only if I'm in a horrible situation
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Re: Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '14, 22:07

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Re: Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Aug 21st, '14, 16:14

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Re: Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Aug 22nd, '14, 15:48

Last bump then tourney
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Re: Just Die Already

Postby Just Silver » Sep 2nd, '14, 21:33

Very last bump
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