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Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 02:00

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What's money to a new life, It's nothing to me
Honestly I'll kill anything with the right fee
Grew up poor as fuck with no opportunity
So I'll perform an abortion even after the pregnancy
Even for a couple grand Ill suffocate that bald fuck
Fuck a baby, then I'll throw it in the back of a dump truck
I'm sick and twisted but for six digits I'll kill that faggot infant
And all of his brothers and sisters, smother it I'm addicted
But I'd rather take a shovel to the dick head, six months old
I'm splitting it's head in, coagulated blood all over my toes
And I'd sit and laugh as I go, and spend the cash
You know just how it goes, once you do it once, you'll do it again
A three month old sleeping, I'll go and uppercut it's chin
And spread it's blood like tribal paint, right under my eyes as I smoke dank
A thousand dollars is the least I'll go , and I'm not touching anything over three years old
So I guess I'm a toddler killer too, I'm only doing this shit because getting jobs is impossible
Once it's out the womb, it's all fair game
Come back to your place with your own sons blood stains
And if it's a daughter I'm in the best off luck
So damn tight when I put the tip in I bust a nut
All over her breasts and butt, and guess what
I laugh all the way to the bank , a thousand bucks in your face
I'll kill a whole hospital if it's possible for a bankroll, eight months old
I'll take a stake to it's skull crack that motherfucker
Even though he had a little dick and no mother would fuckem
Little faggot, now they're all covered in maggots
Why don't you have a baby so I can cash in
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Re: newborn killer

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Aug 24th, '14, 07:14

I'm curious, how long does it take you to write these? Doesn't seem like you spend more than 5 minutes on an entire piece. Don't get me wrong, I like some of your lines. They're even clever, at times, but this is RAP and your rhymes are very poor. Idk what to tell you that I haven't already. Work on improving your rhyming and you'll be golden...maybe.

The overall theme was cool. Haven't seen it done before. Just was executed badly. Some of it doesn't even make sense.

My favorite line was the closing bars:

now they're all covered in maggots
Why don't you have a baby so I can cash in
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Re: newborn killer

Postby mdemaz » Aug 24th, '14, 07:16

this is dope af m8 gud work bra bra
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 12:45

EvryOnesACrtc wrote:I'm curious, how long does it take you to write these? Doesn't seem like you spend more than 5 minutes on an entire piece. Don't get me wrong, I like some of your lines. They're even clever, at times, but this is RAP and your rhymes are very poor. Idk what to tell you that I haven't already. Work on improving your rhyming and you'll be golden...maybe.

The overall theme was cool. Haven't seen it done before. Just was executed badly. Some of it doesn't even make sense.

My favorite line was the closing bars:

now they're all covered in maggots
Why don't you have a baby so I can cash in

Usually I take more time than this piece but yea the rhymes are there you just gotta look

And yea this particular one took about 5 min.
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 12:49

True Wiz wrote:You should try writing conceptual pieces. That helped my song writing.

This was a concept

I just needed to take my time

Plus I was buzzed lol :b:
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 12:49

mdemaz wrote:this is dope af m8 gud work bra bra

Thnx m8
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Re: newborn killer

Postby slims » Aug 24th, '14, 13:09

Disturbing, tbh.
But creative, I guess.
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 14:20

Thanks I think lol
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 24th, '14, 23:11

Bump
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Re: newborn killer

Postby shadyblogger » Aug 25th, '14, 00:44

Your sickest piece yet. And as in sick I mean as in disturbing and horrifying. You said some awful shit but overall it was alright. Some lines were cool and flowed well and others just didn't. Interesting... Glad to see you're experimenting though.
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 25th, '14, 00:49

Thanks guy
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Re: newborn killer

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 26th, '14, 10:40

...See, when I read this shit, I wonder if y'all are just one incident away from being Elliot Rodger status. Smfh. Try writing something more conceptual that won't make me feel like I gotta go to church after reading this bullshit lmao. But if you put this song along with that intro you made for that failed TR tape, you might have a classic on your hands breh. In all seriousness tho, you gotta work on your rhyming and flow. Especially rhyming.
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Supershade » Aug 26th, '14, 21:02

Blogs McGooch wrote:Your sickest piece yet. And as in sick I mean as in disturbing and horrifying. You said some awful shit but overall it was alright. Some lines were cool and flowed well and others just didn't. Interesting... Glad to see you're experimenting though.

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Re: newborn killer

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 28th, '14, 07:50

Horse wrote:
JamaicanPattlez wrote:...See, when I read this shit, I wonder if y'all are just one incident away from being Elliot Rodger status

been saying that about Silver since the Rodger incident happened tbh :whistle:


I just realized... Silver's raps are his manifestos. :o
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Re: newborn killer

Postby Just Silver » Aug 29th, '14, 01:50

Last bump new project
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