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God's not dead..

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God's not dead..

Postby Halftongue Dre » Sep 4th, '14, 05:13

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Mountains, oceans, the sky and stars
not hard to see His visible qualitys
but sadly Satan has the power to blind their minds
they can't see when living in the dark
that He is more real than life
more feel than scars
the air in your lungs
He's the meal when you starve
but humble is the struggle
that most won't succumb to
numb to the love of God
they lean on their own understanding
madness a tragedy when fathomed
trying to plant a seed
but the birds just snatch em
the rocks n thistles
a critical hindrance
leaving little room for growth
both outwardly n inner as
the sinner never can commit
to a life of ease
in the Lord
still in His presence
able to feel the peace
but some do
yea those who believe
in the One sent to us from heaven
others just mock n talk a lot
about senseless things
including me sometimes
if you retrieve those rhymes
but God is real
He's certainly alive
looking down
on the wicked n just alike
just waiting n taking His time
wanting all to repent
but suddenly as unexpected
the dread will set in
and all will know without a doubt
that God's not dead..
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Re: God is real..

Postby shadyblogger » Sep 4th, '14, 05:14

I liked the last 4 bars and their rhythm. But overall it was awful short. Would be cool if you continued writing from this and came up with a longer piece.
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Re: God is real..

Postby Halftongue Dre » Sep 4th, '14, 05:26

Blogs McGooch wrote:I liked the last 4 bars and their rhythm. But overall it was awful short. Would be cool if you continued writing from this and came up with a longer piece.


Thanks man, n yea I'm still working on it. Bits at a time on the sneaks lol..
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