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Silver Spit

Postby Just Silver » Sep 10th, '14, 02:41

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Sorta had writer's block so I need good criticism plz

Headshot boom bitch like the grassy knoll
These drugs soon make me itch, change like passing a toll
I don't act old, on grass, plastic gnomes
Drastically unfold the story, dramatically hold your head, in gory glory
Gradually turn to gold, while your just a marigold, fairy man of orgy
Flower sweet , penis colonoscopy, what you honestly be ...fuckin ,homosex u see
I'm inevitably the sweetest recipe, to grace a mic stand
One day I might jam, my whole right hand through your windpipe and
Grab a lung out, just to replace it with mine
Cause I was placed and designed just to fail and die
But like a snail I'll glide, slowly but surely through life
I've got that death stare to a hater ,with my coroner's eye
I look to the sky , but what's it really provide
But sunlight, so these rich fucks can count up their pride
I'll rip you out of your ride, like the jaws of life
And saw your wife in half, as you saw your wife I laugh
Hysterically I'm historically a lyrical beast
It's like my lyrics are hearing the beat before the paper sheet
Had so much writer's block, a punchline is easy to stop
Haven't been feeling so hot, so excuse me for this drop
But I just needed something to ease this headache
The easel my heads made from is like a chess game
Ill keep it coming like a sex stain
Creative clouds in my mind get ready for my next rain
Hopefully it ain't the same
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby shadyblogger » Sep 10th, '14, 02:45

Nice rhymes and rhythm too bro. Some of the flows were pretty cool imo. Nice piece brah, keep it up.
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Just Silver » Sep 10th, '14, 02:52

Thanks guy I did this piece with a massive headache lol
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Atone » Sep 11th, '14, 22:13

Ever heard of the rapper necro? thats what this reminded me of, idk, i just kinda feel like i could hear this on a necro beat in his voice

thats a good thing tho, Necro is good, this was good, you had alot of good rhymes, it didn't feel to forced, and it flowed nicely, i really liked this one
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Just Silver » Sep 25th, '14, 15:17

Thanks guy

I need to do more writing now that I'm back
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Littliepuppys713 » Sep 25th, '14, 18:07

Busted Your Nuts

Facts of Sins
Shady Lady Wins
Started in 97 would of had heaven
Kimmy touches boys under seven
Married a molester keeps protecting her
Lays with his Bro and calls her a hoe
Feeds the babies poisons
Needs crazyies crews to compete with you
Starts with Claire rape no respect to ask for a date
Next Beta Program that I sent to the Damn did you call me a CAT?
seroiusly goddess cant be hurt by that
Heres what we think of that
calling your self some type of man sucking dicks again
Jewish bitch sucking babies dicks, eating little girls clits all while your tapping it
FBI on your lines, Interscope to blame this time, Selling cocaine
mentally challenging the children brains
Gods rains cant cure
few are even still pure
Jesus wont redeem a pedomile protecting pedophiles
lying to us asking me to trust what lust?
passions lure for a sexy nerd is so unheard
passing minors around your all going down
pussy pics of me you see, not you wish but worry shes only 15
no one taste this dish not even EMINEM
keep your kiss, cds been dissed,pissed, not even missed
Bills to pay, tired of finding you sweaty and gay
Change you say, games you play, do you even know my real name
go back in time and rewind all these songs that are wrong
cumming i was but not for you, punishment earned this is your burn
2014 this is still going on? You took a real man place him in a gerbil
so u can beat little boys purple, Moms on rage who the fuck put her man in a cage.
a pathetic boy who thinks im some toy, so your colesores back rhianna gave u that
or was it dino the dog sucking you off, Herpes II no thank you, Mathers III freaking absurd
ruining reapers names again. Your words not good cant be bonded.
Branded whoremonger cant play with you much longer, getting sick quick keep your shriveled little dick
cum so quick cant even handle this. Missess Kissess you did not want, you'd rather have prostitutes
who sucked of a few before you eww. This is you Marshall Mathers III
Your kids on acid attempting to be massive, witch get some glasses
learn to read your are not part of this history. Hades says Brunet's the name you wont forget
Blessed you are not by the we, go see the old fuddy duddies.
Betray me, Play me, pretend to stay with me, friends
bitch were enemies, no i dont love you back, your raps all crap turned to hip pop
not even getting me off, power to persecute ladies and babies
platforms for whores and the children are getting sore, Moms ripping wewes off,
777 hewer tours fewer aids curers, all so you can be famous
branded whoremonger im gonna rip your anus so far open you will be hopeing
for a quick dick fix cause thats where you like it, on stage with your cats fucking without hats
keep that faggoty raggdy homo shit, do need it jealous of a guy? why? sad you didn't fry him up like a fish
nigger nothing but a glitch, that be to much to wish, im sick of this piss, who cant protect SHIT
so I moved out asking me to suck jew and niggers to pay your rent
that your job getting sucking the knob, hope its a yummy glob,
KEEP YOUR JOB
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Just Silver » Sep 26th, '14, 12:51

Wtf is that
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Littliepuppys713 » Sep 26th, '14, 13:22

you were a post count victim xo
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby shadyblogger » Oct 8th, '14, 03:39

Wtf lmao
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby HPBloodshed » Oct 11th, '14, 18:17

I thought it was alright.
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby shadyblogger » Oct 11th, '14, 23:47

Littliepuppys713 wrote:you were a post count victim xo


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Re: Silver Spit

Postby mdemaz » Oct 12th, '14, 02:42

BOTH WENT IN DAM HARD
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby shadyblogger » Oct 12th, '14, 03:13

That's right
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Re: Silver Spit

Postby Just Silver » Oct 12th, '14, 03:17

mdemaz wrote:BOTH WENT IN DAM HARD

Thnx m8
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