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Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby Atone » Nov 10th, '14, 03:13

i know in the feedback i gave you i said don't diss internet forum rappers but, thats for audio, i aint recordin this throwaway shit for anybody to hear, i'm just fuckin with you on this site, stupid fuck

anyways, Link Of Feed: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=174653&p=2831986#p2831986



(Bridge)
Move to the back of the line again!

(Verse)
Having a tough time finding a song by you i like
no style. and nobody pays attention to the shit you write
compare you to soulja boy, but then again, at least he got noticed
only way people will talk about you is if you get your throat slit
and compared to Eminem? maybe his song fack you wack shit
fact is you need to stop tryin to rap bitch
put the mic back kid, matter of fact, give me the pen
here kid, let me give you a reason to take a shot at me again
Jaba the who? the what? bitch shut the fuck up you fucked up
fuckin with me, your lucks up, bitch you get fucked up,
when i listen to you, it reminds me of when i first started recording
exept back then even i didn't sound so fuckin boring
and the reason Eedee didn't feature you is cuz bitches get no play
thats like tryin to put Andy Milonkis on a song with Kanye
your raps just make us laugh kid, stop tryin to get on with the best
move your wack ass to the back of the line with the rest


(Bridge)
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby mdemaz » Nov 10th, '14, 03:16

weak diss if were being honest not really enough personals and shit

good try tho
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby shadyblogger » Nov 10th, '14, 07:02

Decent imo. Flow was kinda interesting at parts and some of the lines were pretty funny and decent sounding in my head.
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby mdemaz » Nov 10th, '14, 07:57

not nuff insults like

fuck this autistic down syndrome etc tryin to be edgy little boy
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 10th, '14, 19:43

Decent diss imo. Not great, but considering your against Jaba that doesn't really matter lol

But yeah, average-ish.
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby Dewey Decimal » Nov 13th, '14, 21:34

hah niggas is going in
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby Minimii » Nov 14th, '14, 20:55

didnt like it very much maybe like solid 7/10
also the soulja boy line was meh, too much cussin
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It'll have to be bribed from me"
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby Trimss » Nov 15th, '14, 01:44

True Wiz wrote:Rest of it's pretty ehh. Your flow seemed a little off.


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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby Just Silver » Nov 18th, '14, 03:43

This was decent but very short and almost no personals

As a writing piece It's alright but as a diss it could be directed at anyone

Flow was smooth until there was a switch near the end
Overall I'm pretty sure you're better than this but then again it looks entirely unfinished
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Re: Back Of The Line (Jaba Diss)

Postby TheVipBro » Nov 18th, '14, 03:59

when i listen to you, it reminds me of when i first started recording
exept back then even i didn't sound so fuckin boring

i liked that part i guess but as a diss, it ain't that great
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