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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 12:49

i dunno what to do , for once its not about the love for you ,
i take shots at you ,ill destroy yer man and yer homie to,
the way i rap will change the way ya think ,
yeh coz a rap about the truth day ta brink ,
yeh to the brink of the earth, i will rep ma turth,
when the truth a rap gets put through the roof ,
and big up to ma man you know the truth ,
also rae keep ya mind focused and stay on the prize ,
coz if you keep at it youll be great yer always On the rise,
this smart raps confusing ma mind ,
so im ending it losing ya time ,

dam i feel like im back in school lol anywae ill keep at it :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Aug 24th, '06, 14:29

dude lol thanks for that little line
it's not bad but yeah keep at it i'm sure it'll be waaay better before the end of the day :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 14:32

yeh its hard trying to hit multis n stuff lol but ill et the hang of it

and no problem lol
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Postby Rae » Aug 24th, '06, 14:33

wow thats good! im sorry i didnt read it as soon as i got on :( ...

good job :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 14:53

Rae wrote:wow thats good! im sorry i didnt read it as soon as i got on :( ...

good job :D


its kl :d n thx :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 25th, '06, 13:44

bumpy any more feed on dis please :D
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Postby C-Game » Aug 25th, '06, 14:08

nice work so is it gonna be on ur tape
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Postby AspirinE » Aug 25th, '06, 14:10

Pretty nice man.


but theresone thing i would recomend to make an lyricsound more entertaining.
Experiment on flow techniques. Add more illiteration to enhance flow and create unique sound.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 25th, '06, 23:57

ASP wrote:Pretty nice man.


but theresone thing i would recomend to make an lyricsound more entertaining.
Experiment on flow techniques. Add more illiteration to enhance flow and create unique sound.


thanks asp thats the sorta feedback i need :D
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