First song, need some help.

[.Giorgo.]

My first song ever. I'm gonna put audio on it.
As soon i get my Mic and someone else.

[Begin] Yo, Watup ? Just Let It Go..
With My Homie (Other Person).[Begin]

[Verse 1]
Yo, yo, Just let it go..
Let it go, let i out of ya live.
Just fuck it, forget it, just let i go..

Forget this boy, he aint worth it.
He's just a fuckin' outlaw.
Drives always around in tha hoods.
But never perform a driveby.
It's just a fakass gangster.
I'm no racist, don't understeand me wrong.
But that guy is not good for you. Forget it.
Just let i go, lose it from ya head.
Just lose it, someday you'le thank me for this.

[Chorus]
Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..
[Chorus]

[Verse 2 ?]
In Progress. I need someone that helps me.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

ill do whatever help you need ( just geting in first lol ill read it now lol )

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

sweet man i really like it now what help ya need ?

[.Giorgo.]

U really like it . Ur.. al the help .
For verse 2 i gues. And how to get on beats etc. I'm gonna record is soon.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

U really like it . Ur.. al the help .
For verse 2 i gues. And how to get on beats etc. I'm gonna record is soon.

so do you want me to write a verse for myself ? right a verse for you ? or help you write a verse for yourself ?.....as for beats leave that jsut the now once the songs wrote ill help you with that ^_^

[.Giorgo.]

I want to make a song with someone.
And i need help for the second verse that sings that other person.

Or the other person write for himself.
And i also want some english - tips.

I mean, is my english a bit better now ?
And mistakes, could it be better ?

And major thanks for your help .

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

I want to make a song with someone.
And i need help for the second verse that sings that other person.

Or the other person write for himself.
And i also want some english - tips.

I mean, is my english a bit better now ?
And mistakes, could it be better ?

And major thanks for your help .

kool ill write myself a verse......ill sort your english in tou verse in a second BUT its pretty good not many mistakes and well jsut check my next post lol

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

My first song ever. I'm gonna put audio on it.
As soon i get my Mic and someone else.

[Begin] Yo, Watup ? Just Let It Go..
With My Homie (Other Person).[Begin]

[Verse 1]
Yo, yo, Just let it go..
Let it go, let i out of ya live.
Just fuck it, forget it, just let i go..

Forget this boy, he aint worth it.
He's just a fuckin' outlaw.
Drives always around in tha hoods.
But never perform a driveby.
It's just a fakass gangster.
I'm no racist, don't understeand me wrong.
But that guy is not good for you. Forget it.
Just let i go, lose it from ya head.
Just lose it, someday you'le thank me for this.

[Chorus]
Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..
[Chorus]

[Verse 2 ?]
In Progress. I need someone that helps me.

[Begin] Yo, Watup ? Just Let It Go..
With My Homie (Other Person).[Begin]

[Verse 1]
Yo, yo, Just let it go..
Let it go, let it out of ya life.
Just fuck it, forget it, just let it go..

Forget this boy, he aint worth it.
He's just a fuckin' outlaw.
Always drives around in tha hoods.
But never perform a driveby.
It's just a fake-ass gangster.
I'm no racist, don't understeand me wrong.
But that guy is not good for you. Forget it.
Just let it go, lose it from ya head.
Just lose it, someday you'll thank me for this.

[Chorus]
Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..
[Chorus]



liek i said not many errors lol

to make it better.......

Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..

work on that maybe try give it a little more rythming or flow.......

the verse i kool though

have my verse soon

[.Giorgo.]

Yeah, it was not my plan to put some rhymes in it.
But soon i'l post this verse, a lil bit different with some rhymes in it.

Thx dude .

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

these guys have formed there own clan
not knowing im about to end there plans
coz i seen them about the street , kissing there heat,
they coudlnt last a day in ma shoes ,
and if they tried theyd all lose ,
so pick yer feet up throw yer heat away ,
coz by now its the end of ya days ,
just pack up or back up,
before you get a smack up ,
adios bitch yer lifes up ,

my verse dude

[.Giorgo.]

So the end song looks somethin' lik this. Is this enough ..

[Begin] Yo, Watup ? Just Let It Go..
With My Homie Bar.[Begin]

[Verse 1]
Yo, yo, Just let it go..
Let it go, let it out of ya life.
Just fuck it, forget it, just let it go..

Forget this boy, he aint worth it.
He's just a fuckin' outlaw.
Always drives around in tha hoods.
But never perform a driveby.
It's just a fake-ass gangster.
I'm no racist, don't understeand me wrong.
But that guy is not good for you. Forget it.
Just let it go, lose it from ya head.
Just lose it, someday you'll thank me for this.

[Chorus]
Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..
[Chorus]

[Verse 2 (Bar)]
These guys have formed there own clan.
Not knowing im about to end there plans.
Coz i seen them about the street , kissing there heat,
They coudlnt last a day in ma shoes,
and if they tried theyd all lose.
So pick yer feet up throw yer heat away.
Coz by now its the end of ya days.
Just pack up or back up,
before you get a smack up ,
Adios bitch yer lifes up.

[Chorus]
Just Lose it, this guy aint nothing.
Just lose him outta ya head.
Get him outta ya mind. U'l thank me someday..
[Chorus]

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

It was pretty like.......weird lol.

good or bad weird

[C-Game]

georgio ur style is cool
and bar will fill up ur song nicely
if ur verse is a rap then put a lil more rhymes in to it

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

georgio ur style is cool
and bar will fill up ur song nicely
if ur verse is a rap then put a lil more rhymes in to it

my verse....?

[C-Game]

not ur verse bar........
goergies verse