a kick back rhyme <--- need feed back

[C-Game]

i was feelin bored and wrote a rhyme to tr.waddaya think

its noncense , u guys react like i'm the lochness
big monster , am i the first lankan with obnoxious
colosus in a lusus nature with lyrics tht combusters
ur mommas and papas and put stoppers with ur lovers
its a constant tht i'm stick with this noncesce
with a conscious with no fuckin angelic responses
and am i the first in this nation to see and say like it is
if bow wow can do tht y shldnt i kurnive it clean
so tell me do i promote rap or i just demote that
and my fiendish girly friends normally reports that
i'm the devil in a sweet frame with a sweet voice
now that i can rap i am left with no other choice
and this envioues souls despite c-game
do i go fuck abt the notion of these burn females
so i earn respect and take hate and dispense
to this virgin girls who read this and act so intensced

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nice man some real nice rythmes

[sinemm]

nice man some real nice rythmes

i agree..