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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 31st, '06, 00:15

Chorus
Raise the bar up, perfect ya flow,
got higher the standards everwere you go,

Raise the bar up, try match me,
the young gun, from the Y.B.T,

Raise the bar up, do it now,
before i kick you out my town,

Raise the bar up,come on be,
Raise the bar up, try match me,

Verse 1 (unfinished)
when a spit ma flow, it gonni blow, gonni go woah,
aint the best now but it will be soon ,
so rigid itll take yer heart out with a spoon,
im shooting so high a just crashed in the moon,
back to reality of writing this rap ,
yeh i know its good clap clap ,
no wer near the standard imma be at ,
in a years time my flow will blow ya mind,
if you a lady ma lyrics will undress you ,
take you to bed and shag you to ,

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Not finished yet just soemthign im workning on :D
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Postby Rae » Aug 31st, '06, 00:18

wow! that was really good! i liked it ... when u read it ... its like it comes wit a beat already (well i dunno how 2 explain it lol) but it was awesome! keep it up and make sure u post the rest of the verses (just assuming there would b more b/c its a song i guess lol)

yupp its good clap clap lmao :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 31st, '06, 00:22

Rae wrote:wow! that was really good! i liked it ... when u read it ... its like it comes wit a beat already (well i dunno how 2 explain it lol) but it was awesome! keep it up and make sure u post the rest of the verses (just assuming there would b more b/c its a song i guess lol)

yupp its good clap clap lmao :D


thx :D lol well i got the sort of beat i want for ti in my head....maybe i projected it well with the writing ( thats a good thing ) lol :D and yeh there will eb bout 3 verses :D and audio :D
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Postby Rae » Aug 31st, '06, 00:29

awesome! i cant wait 2 hear it! :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 31st, '06, 14:23

any more feedback ? come on ppl :D
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