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V-Dogz New Rap ya GOTTA PEEP DIS OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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V-Dogz New Rap ya GOTTA PEEP DIS OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Postby V-DogDaMenace » Aug 22nd, '05, 02:53

im FLAWLESS WIT THESE SICK PLANS , grind down ya bones-till-theyre-crushed, G you couldnt "blow-off-the-rust" giving "ORAL TO THE TIN MAN"!! //
You cant match the GAME OF THIS SATANIST , figuring ur NAME IN A RAPING BITCH cos its like ur "facin that alias again", cos u gettin "BLAZED" BY THE FLAMES IN THIS!! //
this faggots in for a BEATING COS THIS QUEERS WACK, leave BLEEDIN WIT UR REAR SLASHED so i'll "drop crazy again" like RE-RELEASING BRITNEY SPEARS TRACKS!! //
i'll TEACH YA NOT TO PUSH ME , im EVIL TO THE ROOKIES plus "chlamydia aint no flower", theres always white shit "LEAKIN FROM THIS PUSSY"!! eughh //
You cant IMITATE MY TALENT, the SCRIPTS ARE RAISING HAVOC , we only gotta "look at that frog" to know "crazy's an IRRITATING FAGGOT"!! //
Its BLATENT YOU CANT HOLD MA FLOW , man i aint kind-to-liers but u couldnt bring a "line-of-fire" if u had "SATAN IN A RODEO!"//
a beating-is-due, reaper-is-cruel , i come BLAZING WITH THE ROUGH QUOTES but its ok, this kid aint "leavin his crew" cos its "CRAZY WITH THE CUT THROAT"!! //
im FUCKIN WIT UR HEALTH, i'll have ya own riders RUNNING IN TO HELP cos this kid "rides the bunny" more than "BUNNYS RIDE THEMSELVES"!! //

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Postby Vettori » Aug 22nd, '05, 07:09

I give ya a 10, id say it's safe to say your just gettin better :D

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Postby eminemcaparica » Aug 22nd, '05, 13:18

i give you 10, damn, you really giving hard on it
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Postby shadypelkey » Aug 22nd, '05, 19:46

aiyo thats some good shit, but most of seems to be like repeating and rhymin it with something totally diff. if that makes sense, iunno
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Postby 4D » Aug 22nd, '05, 21:19

shadypelkey wrote:aiyo thats some good shit, but most of seems to be like repeating and rhymin it with something totally diff. if that makes sense, iunno


I agree with Pelkey, they`re are very good lines, but, they don`t make a verse, there`s no flow.
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Postby Darjan333 » Aug 22nd, '05, 23:49

It is alright man...keep postin 8)
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