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Postby soperman005 » Sep 6th, '06, 03:24

the first time i saw you
and u spoke it was like the volume
of ur voice increased and i listened
for the fisrt time and i invisioned
us livin together, then u left, missin
in that dream and then i felt imprisoned
I insist on reminiscin' on our history
Because without the past life is misery
the first day we kissed exists visually
in my head like ceremonies performed ritually
without ur presence, the very essence
of any hope i even have lessens,
when i'm with you, you set me free
thats why i never want you to leave
I love you Janine, way more than you see
I'll unconditionally love you, profusely
So I count the days we spend,
Cherishing and counting till' the end
You've mended my soul like a best friend
That's why I'll never accept or settle for less then
perfection from myself.

im gonna add a lil more but gimmme ur thoughts on it
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Postby soperman005 » Sep 6th, '06, 03:57

comeon leave some dang feedback people
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Postby Shadyluva » Sep 6th, '06, 03:58

THATZ ii SOOOO NiiCE...ii LUVED iiT :( :happy:

ii WiiSH MY BF WROTE MY SUMTHiiN LiiKE DAT...ii WUD LUV HiiM 4EVER :)
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Postby Inches » Sep 6th, '06, 04:02

nice rhymes man
youve inspired me to make one for my girl
props

:worship:
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Postby soperman005 » Sep 6th, '06, 04:28

more feedback plz...
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Postby Infliction » Sep 6th, '06, 21:36

good stuff man, its easy to rhyme when you really care about a girl :) I wrote a lot for my ex. hsavnt rote any hate yet tho:P
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Postby Suppa » Sep 14th, '06, 17:39

....
whts happenin
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