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little thing my friend wrote

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little thing my friend wrote

Postby Deadishot » Oct 13th, '06, 22:31

my friend wrote this thing... thought it was k.
wat yall think


I speak without thinking
And cry never blinking
I can't stop talking
And trip when I'm walking
I get angry, people get on my nerves
And I'm chestless, without curves
I laugh obnoxiously at awkward times
everythings a constant crime
I am a criminal that has no plan
And I am a lover that has no man
I let people control my fate
And I am left used and full of hate
I sleep better with thunder and rain
And tell me, am I going insane?
I don't know what I am, what I'll see
And I don't know where I am, where I'll be
My only color is blue
And I can't stop myself from falling for you
I am existent, I breathe the same air
And you don't know any of it; you don't care.
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Postby .Giorgo. » Oct 13th, '06, 22:57

iLike it. It's very good, nice rhymes.
And i understeand it very good. Tell ur friend that he/she has potential.
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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Oct 14th, '06, 21:28

nice ryhmes.......like it...,!!!! :worship:
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