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Just A Little Too Late

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Just A Little Too Late

Postby Inzanity » Oct 16th, '06, 23:05

Mabey I'll add a 3rd verse mabey I won't it all depends on weather u guys like the first 2 verses. So let me know what u think.


(Verse 1)
U ripped my heart right out of my chest
I haven't been the same since the day that u left
I'd rather spend eternity burnin' in Hell
Then spend a lifetime livin' without ur love
Can't u see I'm yearning for help
I can't deal wit this anymore I'm hurt enough
I can't sleep at night
Evertime I close my eyes I see ur face
With all this pain that I keep inside
I'd give anything for this torment to be erased
Cause' inside my soul is screaming for an end
So I hold to dreaming of what could've been
And u know I'm needing, u now more then, then
My soul is bleeding, from all this torment and
I'd give anything to have u back again
and now that thats been said

(Course)
I know that I'm just a little to late
And there's no way I could ever
Get rid of this pain
I should've never walked away
I was stupid and now I've just got ta say
That I'll always love u, and I wish
There was a way to stop the pain
But I'm just a little too late

(Verse 2)
I wish I could take it back
All the pain that we caused eachother
But it's too late for that
I'd give anything if we could still be lovers
But that can't happen I've lost u forever
And through all of this pain I've got to remember
That lovin' u will only break my heart
So it's only best if we stay apart
I'm at my lonelyest, u slayed me heart
If my love for u could only just fade to dark
U left me hear with shaddered trust
Left over from our battered love
I went from "shadows of a broken past"
to shadows of a broken love
and now I'm left just hoping that
we'll still be friends, it's the best that I could hope for us

(Course)
I know that I'm just a little to late
And there's no way I could ever
Get rid of this pain
I should've never walked away
I was stupid and now I've just got ta say
That I'll always love u, and I wish
There was a way to stop the pain
But I'm just a little too late
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Re: Just A Little Too Late

Postby Marth » Oct 18th, '06, 21:05

you need to make the verses twice or three times longer men, Rhymes are good..
subject... isn't really a good subject
And what ya wanna tell, i still don't understand
The world has gone crazy like eminem on kim
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Re: Just A Little Too Late

Postby Inzanity » Oct 19th, '06, 22:08

Marth wrote:you need to make the verses twice or three times longer men, Rhymes are good..
subject... isn't really a good subject
And what ya wanna tell, i still don't understand


it's about a break up with my ex I don't normally write love/break up songs but I'm going through a tough time wit my ex and that's y I wrote it
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