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You Think

Postby .Giorgo. » Oct 28th, '06, 19:11

You Think.. - Giorgo

Verse 01

You think that you're better..
You think that you're the best.
But that isn't, I kill you in many ways.
You'lle get it tired, you will commit suicide, with no delays.
You aint got no interest in living after you met me.
I'll don't need a gun, don't need a tec. I'l kill ya with words.

You think that u have homies, but they are snitches.
You think that u have a girl, i fucked her like bitches.
You think that u are great. You must go and see a Hitch.
Cuz I fucked your mum, I fucked your girl, all like a bitch.
This is like a tail-on-neck race.. I'll end it when i want.
But i want to play with you, kiddie. You are so nonchalant.

[Chorus]
You think,, you think a lot. I'll end it.
I'll destroy ya whole life, bit-by-bit.
After me, you're nothin', Ill pas ya like a storm.
A lot of damage, and nothin' else.. Like a norm.

Verse 02

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Postby Inzanity » Oct 28th, '06, 22:13

that was pretty good it could use some work though try to do multis
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 29th, '06, 17:14

EmptyPromises wrote:that was pretty good it could use some work though try to do multis


same :sweating:
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Postby C-Game » Oct 29th, '06, 17:37

good structure
some of it nicely flow
as clarky said pitch in some in bar multis and ur good to go
nice work bro :8)
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