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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 00:16

chorus
rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

verse 1

comes like a tronado burns like lava , im shooting to the stars like nava ,
im so cleva , nobady backs me , man , whateva , me and rapping together,
itll never let go clinches to my soul like inches does a pole ,
we got more power than birth control , i rap like its body and soul ,
so lets check , when a started a was shit no other way to explain it ,
i thank yall coz you retained to say it , then a gained it, now ma shit hit ,
a just noticed a need to, writing is me, its exciting you see, like lighting a flame tree ,
will a make it wait and see, until then , nobodies fucking with me and the U-W-C,
so fi you think imma give up , never , ma rythms always live up and they clever,
no thought bout chucking it whatsoever , imma be on news at ten with trever ,
my blood runs rythm , ma mouth runs dime , ma brain shouts climb ,
they people say crime,the gangstas shoot nine, a just say it my time to shine,
so imma keep on rapping bout my everyday life , or bout fucking yer co-wife,
a battle with the hunting knife , every beef a make it constant strife,
and if you reading thinking im misleading remember im succeeding ,
slowly and surely , even if im bleading the rythm meaning,

chorus
rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

Verse 2

see a got a goal, so many of you know thinking am whole but there a part missing,
so am admitting a need to make it with my spitting , no time for quiting ,
a got to get on coz practice makes perfect , mistakes make correct ,
so whatever a wrecked before a never neglected no a joost collected all ,
put it into ma brain and learnt from that werent glum combat ,
a didnt have to fight with it a aceepting it now a perfecting it ,
a still got lots of stuff to do , a still got lots of blood to spue ,
coz if rappings in my blood then its sick to , n this is a quick view,
fuck you , most rappers only care bout being a millionare ,
they lost the purpose of this music like saying snap in sollitaire,
but i aint a keep the real goals in sight , to be the greatest ,
and when im the latest , theyll detest me , my whole life was built to test me ,
so if a make it im pass with flying grades , when a shoto to the top like a flying blade,
destroying everything in sight , like dinamite i ignite and tonight is fight night ,
ma rythm be tight right recite the write youll enjoy it like a turkish delight,
so im still not there but am closer the shit you hearing here stands it composer,
like mozart dont try tear me and my words apart , itd destroy my heart, coz

chorus
rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud,

rappings in ma soul , rappings in ma blood,
comes like a flash flood, wassup bud


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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 18:36

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Postby C-Game » Nov 6th, '06, 20:01

nice strcuture
it flows well
good lyrics like em
chorus was catchy i liked it
O/A its nice do ur second verse of it....
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Postby yoshi » Nov 6th, '06, 20:57

*gives feed* :flower:

/we got more power than birth control , i rap like its body and soul /

^ i like this line :happy: why don't u ever post finished stuff, huh? :shifty: :shakehead:
Maybe wrote:I'm so awesome, I don't mind looking desperate.

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 21:05

yoshi wrote:*gives feed* :flower:

/we got more power than birth control , i rap like its body and soul /

^ i like this line :happy: why don't u ever post finished stuff, huh? :shifty: :shakehead:


ill finish this tonight :smoking:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 21:35

Bump its finished!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Postby yoshi » Nov 6th, '06, 21:41

completed!! :shocked: yay

it's awesome :8)
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 21:43

yoshi wrote:completed!! :shocked: yay

it's awesome :8)


thanks :smoking:
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Postby Kez » Nov 6th, '06, 22:17

Good flow and structure
Catchy hook (chorus)
Lot of good rhymes, could use more multis i suppose.

O/a it's awesome like most said :worship:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 22:20

thanx man :worship:

and i dont get what you and cgame mean i know it could have mroe maybe but it does have alot of multis small and simple but they there
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Postby Kez » Nov 6th, '06, 22:25

Bar wrote:thanx man :worship:

and i dont get what you and cgame mean i know it could have mroe maybe but it does have alot of multis small and simple but they there


Yeah, i just sometimes miss them i suppose. So used to seeing them in bold from my own :sweating:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 6th, '06, 22:27

Kez wrote:
Bar wrote:thanx man :worship:

and i dont get what you and cgame mean i know it could have mroe maybe but it does have alot of multis small and simple but they there


Yeah, i just sometimes miss them i suppose. So used to seeing them in bold from my own :sweating:


i dont like bolding coz some people bold so it looks like a multi but it really aint
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Postby Kez » Nov 6th, '06, 22:41

No i know you don't like bolding just saying that's why i might miss them sometimes.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 7th, '06, 09:30

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Postby C-Game » Nov 7th, '06, 16:54

wat did i say :confusion:
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