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Still D.R.E Instrumental, feedback please

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Still D.R.E Instrumental, feedback please

Postby Infliction » Nov 14th, '06, 22:11

This goes to the Still D.R.E instrumental, I dont have a title for it yet, and its not completely done yet, I still need a 3rd verse. Feedback please :)


(~~EDIT~~: et tu peux voir quand je crache.; That means "and you can see it when I spit.")



(Verse 1)
Here comes the next hit yall gon be bobbin' ya heads wit
Eyes be open when you hear me, yall be like oh shit
This kid is true, et tu peux voir quand je crache
Imma never stop writin' on this pad, my death bed is where you'll find my last
Shit you gon blast, outchya ride, fuck drivin' fast, lay back and glide
Bob ya head and vibe, and enjoy this shit till the beat cuts out
Listen to it while you fuckin' the bitch, till that nut bust out
Rob the liquor store down the road, its like thugs in-thugs out
Never leave a man behind, that's complete dishonour
That shit should be writtin' on a thug coat-of-armour
I'll take you for everything you've got, milk you like a farmer
I approach people and all I hear is them stammer and stutter
I'll spread ya brains on the pavement like they was bread and butter
If yall feelin' my shit, get outcha seat, throw the deuce and say word up.

(Chorus)
Imma be rockin' this shit till I'm down in the dirt
Long as I'm alive, I'll take the good with the hurt
To be curt, I gotta make some fuckin' money
Once I hit the top, you aint never gon' bump me

(Verse 2)
People say to me "Your fucked in life" I just dont care, thats kinda my problem
I say fuck it, when Im older imma rob them, imma either be workin for the mob then, or doin' somethin' wit this pen
My rhymes stem from the core of my heart, the rhymes that spew from my mouth like darts
The flow that jump-starts hearts, makes em miss a beat
Still D.R.E on this shit, the beat so heavy it'll beat ya fleet down to the street
Drop to the floor when you see the heat poppin' out the back seat window of the Bentley Continental GT
24" spinnin' through the city of Montreal, 514 where yall at, getcha hands up, ye just like that
Spin it back lemme drop another track, add a lil more green to my paper stack
Gotta make my mark in this industry that's so called "strictly black"
Eminem opened the gate for so many apiring white rappers, god bless
And for people in my situation it aint just "Do your best"
Its to outperform the rest, and come out on top
Get the ball rollin' so that it dont stop
Cuz this is my only chance to be somethin', it's either rhyme or flop...


(Chorus)
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Postby C-Game » Nov 15th, '06, 18:02

yea it flows well to the beat bro

et tu peux voir quand je crache

wat??


lyrics were awesome
i love it
actually i did it to Still Dre 2 times he he
nice stuff bro
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Postby Infliction » Nov 15th, '06, 22:19

cgame wrote:yea it flows well to the beat bro

et tu peux voir quand je crache

wat??


lyrics were awesome
i love it
actually i did it to Still Dre 2 times he he
nice stuff bro


Sorry, i forgot i had that in there. Thats french for "And you can see it when I spit." I live in montreal and it bi-lengual here so sometimes I put a line or 2 of french in my rhymes. I'll explain the meaning next time. Thanks for the feedback man
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Postby C-Game » Nov 16th, '06, 17:06

ha ha
i was singin along to still dre and wen that part came my toungue twisted
he he

anyway nice stufff bro
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Postby Infliction » Nov 16th, '06, 18:11

lmaoo, thanks a lot man.
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Postby Infliction » Nov 18th, '06, 20:13

any other feedback?
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