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My very first rhymes, my very first rap.

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My very first rhymes, my very first rap.

Postby dadeem » Nov 16th, '06, 21:36

This raps are so shitzo dizzle my shizlle nizlle

Yo wazzaaaaap!!?
I cannot rap like I did it t'morrow
'cause i'm in sorrow, My brother is right here next to me,
Gee, wadyoumean? I can't rap??
I can do anything you can't, everywhere you can't!
my next step is to kidnap,
a masturbating jap.
This is my ressurection
Because there is no suction
So what if it takes time, we won't decline
'Cause you're mine, my valentine
I want you girl, you make me swirl
I want ya in my bed
don't make me sad, make me mad!!
After that's done, I see how you light you're cigarette,
never to forget, how ya talk on you're mobile-phone
all alone,
What am I supposed
blue smoke curling out you're nose
Wearing one of my shirts and what some call pantyhose
You look wicked in sucha clothes, long legs like a antilope
let me rap, it is crap, just take the next stap into my lab,
I do not test with animals, no monkey's, rats or mice
Just throw the fucking dice,
The only thing I rap with are human beings,
we only test tha doom,
tha deem,
dadeem, dadoom
martinos is back on the floor
we won't go outdoor
we just make another rap faster i can kill a jap(wow!)
it isn't hard to make a rap, take a beat, spit some words and emerge
And leave them behind, confused and blind
All these words combined and refined
Respect my mind
I bow down to no man!
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In our lab we made a rap, so shizzle,
ya feet begon ta dance before ya know it, those who now that now it.
But you're probably told to follow the flow, so go
The product was tested at a human station
we had so much participation, it was worth a celebration!
It was like a mass destruction, but you could speak of a mass erection
it was worse to find a better beat, to have a better seat
it all doesn't matter it's just a torn sweater
we just make it flowing, make it growing
we've find out that if you like this music, it isn't making you sick.
No big brick licking your dick
a masserection, chain reaction is coming up, it 's just drinking it up
I'm giving you back up
anyway what's the worse of it,
This is no shit, this is a hit
we just rap like a little kid
so come along and sit, you got to admit
tell me how I spit it!

when u're ill, my music makes you iller
I'm a killer, yes yes it was me, I pay guilty
and on the count of three, I pull back to pee
'cause I'm a VIP, you get down on your knee, hey that's an idea
Yeah just go on, come along
I'm donkey kong, oh so strong, when you listen to this song
You might think I'm wrong, this is not where I belong
but I just rap, take the step, watch out not to snap.
i just find out that if you're mad, I'm sad.
because of the music, blowing your mind
there is nothing I can't find
watch out boy, before you annoy

don't listen now, and i fear you will die
do you want to know why?
cause when i rap, yes I discovered in the lab, you get high and cry
We discovered our music is healing
you only have to go in, start with feeling
our music is good for you're health
and yes it's also good for the wealth
So I say goodbye to the enemy, it's been too long, come on

my mom's in da kitchen
It smells delicious
But I can do the dishes
That's not one o' my wishes



I thank you from the bottom of my heart and my wife's bottom

Make raps, not war...


I'll post some more. so you can see I am improved.
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Postby C-Game » Nov 17th, '06, 18:35

nice stuff man
imma give u a full review soon
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Postby D@vid » Nov 17th, '06, 23:23

the best line is "a masturbating jap"
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Postby Kez » Nov 17th, '06, 23:28

Structure was all over the place
Basic rhymes
Some good lines and punchlines

Keep workin on it :smoking:
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Postby Tomega » Nov 17th, '06, 23:52

dfoess wrote:the best line is "a masturbating jap"


LOL, it really was
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Postby Rae » Nov 20th, '06, 00:27

nice ...

def. keep practicing .... nothin helps more than practicing :D

keep it up!!! :D
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Postby shadyone187211 » Nov 20th, '06, 13:39

Tomega wrote:
dfoess wrote:the best line is "a masturbating jap"


LOL, it really was



that shit was funny dont stop spittin practice makes perfect
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