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[Rain Matrix]

I can't Remember when I was a Child but no one can Dismember my Smile
say I'm Not Hot can't ignore tha Embers in my Style january to December I make it worth While

everytime u wake up it's a Long Day when u do it tha Wrong Way
this is where tha Strong Play until every fiber of our beings has Gone Astray

we battle nothing short of Individual Contact or Residual Attacks
if u feeling down pick up tha Digital Slack paint wit words use Visual Facts

I Think About my past I'm Sinking Down Fast I have to Look Up
Standing in Full after Landing in a Hole shaking my head it neva Took Luck

I'm a man wit Friends but I have Landed close to tha End
I'll neva be Handed Amends even Stranded I can't Pretend
I never Planned This Sin if I Manage to Win
I'll Brandish a Pen and try not to feel so Damaged Again

seeing the Clock Hurts knowing it will neva Stop makes it Worse
feelings subside when I Drop a Verse I neva Forgot what thats Worth

when I was young I Had to Improvise cuz tha Bad always came in Disguise
wish I could have seen it through my Dads Eyes instead i got Mad and got High

I neva had to Loot fo Drugs I will say it was a Substitute fo Love
I look back at my Youth and Shrug knowing tha real Truth comes from Above

I need ta Focus on tha Bogus Hocus Pocus that is tha Devils Lies
His Wisdom Is From Suffering Enuff Wording stay on tha Level of tha Wise

I'm a man wit Friends but I have Landed close to tha End
I'll neva be Handed Amends even Stranded I can't Pretend
I never Planned This Sin if I Manage to Win
I'll Brandish a Pen and try not to feel so Damaged Again

my Prayer is that everthing I Say Here becomes Connected to Teach
yes it is Protected in Speech but if I have my way it is Expected to Reach

a Teeter Totter a Greeter and a Spotter tha Balance Stays Real
Scale Measures tha Tale of Pleasures tha Valient Talent Plays on how dey Feel

this mic is a Mans Relic sometimes it seems Angelic neva alone cane we Finish tha Best
dialect Tearing tha Powers Clash don't waste ya time Staring at tha Hourglass make ya Minutes Blessed

I can only say So Much I'm in No Rush to say it all I'd Go Nuts
make ya Words Shout if dey have Heard Doubt it's better to keep ya Flow Hushed

I'm a man wit Friends but I have Landed close to tha End
I'll neva be Handed Amends even Stranded I can't Pretend
I never Planned This Sin if I Manage to Win
I'll Brandish a Pen and try not to feel so Damaged Again

[4D]

Gotta say I really liked that. Got some nice multies, but, also got some real strong issues in it too. A very strong rhyme, imo, lovin' it man!!

Only maybe one thing to critique, about your structure. Just maybe instead of seperating the verses after every 2 lines, make it verse, chorus, verse, chorus, would be slightly more pleasing on the eye.

For example :

I can't Remember when I was a Child but no one can Dismember my Smile
say I'm Not Hot can't ignore tha Embers in my Style january to December I make it worth While
everytime u wake up it's a Long Day when u do it tha Wrong Way
this is where tha Strong Play until every fiber of our beings has Gone Astray
we battle nothing short of Individual Contact or Residual Attacks
if u feeling down pick up tha Digital Slack paint wit words use Visual Facts
I Think About my past I'm Sinking Down Fast I have to Look Up
Standing in Full after Landing in a Hole shaking my head it neva Took Luck

Chorus:
I'm a man wit Friends but I have Landed close to tha End
I'll neva be Handed Amends even Stranded I can't Pretend
I never Planned This Sin if I Manage to Win
I'll Brandish a Pen and try not to feel so Damaged Again

seeing the Clock Hurts knowing it will neva Stop makes it Worse
feelings subside when I Drop a Verse I neva Forgot what thats Worth
when I was young I Had to Improvise cuz tha Bad always came in Disguise
wish I could have seen it through my Dads Eyes instead i got Mad and got High
I neva had to Loot fo Drugs I will say it was a Substitute fo Love
I look back at my Youth and Shrug knowing tha real Truth comes from Above
I need ta Focus on tha Bogus Hocus Pocus that is tha Devils Lies
His Wisdom Is From Suffering Enuff Wording stay on tha Level of tha Wise

(Chorus)

my Prayer is that everthing I Say Here becomes Connected to Teach
yes it is Protected in Speech but if I have my way it is Expected to Reach
a Teeter Totter a Greeter and a Spotter tha Balance Stays Real
Scale Measures tha Tale of Pleasures tha Valient Talent Plays on how dey Feel
this mic is a Mans Relic sometimes it seems Angelic neva alone cane we Finish tha Best
dialect Tearing tha Powers Clash don't waste ya time Staring at tha Hourglass make ya Minutes Blessed
I can only say So Much I'm in No Rush to say it all I'd Go Nuts
make ya Words Shout if dey have Heard Doubt it's better to keep ya Flow Hushed

Doesn't effect the rhyme though man, got no problems with that!

[C-Game]

as usual man ur writin is filled with great multies and rhymes
love em
and i agree with fordie
u got deep meanin in this shit man
keep it up