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Raw Power! (Bit Sick) Tourney warm-up.

Postby 4D » Dec 29th, '06, 03:06

Just felt like a little keystyle. Just wrote it, spent about 20 mins on it.

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I feel like I wanna rip a torso, not just a little bit but more so,
Too sick for porno, eatin kids ribs like bizkits dipped n cocoa,
Depicted in slow mo, saliva drippin' while I slice n' rip 'em
Apart, lugs, guts, heart, lungs, butt starts pissin' brown,
Twistin' round, squirmin' human vermin on da filthy ground
My ravenous cannibal antics actin back with animal frantics,
a damagin' practice of raw power devourin' cowerin' prey,
I`m devout, n pray to the power south of the ground 'n clay,
I prowl n slay Without a cloud of pain or hint of conscience,
This isn't nonsense, i'm slittin' sisters in ther' convents
Chopped mince is the contents of the only comparison,
A Mass of massacre, one nun escaped, totally embarrassin,
but, hopefully Aspirin my homie cathes her 'n brings her back,
No strings attached, just gagged n bound, to be shagged n drowned,
And dragged around in bags n found six months later,
I`m a sick cunt hater, A killa, Atilla the hun Nun slayer,
None greater, slut waster, bust a nut in a butt raper,
But, paper 'n ink is the white n black of the habit I kill,
I write attacks at any guy who acts like he inhabits my skill!

P.s A wee mention for Asp there, needed some similar soundin syllablles. :D
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Postby Kez » Dec 29th, '06, 03:26

Your stuff is always dope and this is no different.

Nice work
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Postby 4D » Dec 29th, '06, 03:31

Thanks a lot mate, cool to see you like my rhymes. :D

Title is lame though, I always name them afterwards, by pickin out a few cool words, gonna change it in a minute I think!
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Postby 4D » Dec 29th, '06, 03:54

Killa wrote:and i dont do writing at this time so very good shit huge respect for 2:30 dope lyricism lmao


LMao, thanks G. just felt like a bit of practice, it`s quiet at this time, so not too hard to get in the zone. My eyes are getting heavy as fuck now though, hittin the sack soon! :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 29th, '06, 04:01

damn that was fricking sick can't wait to see what you create during battle time lol

keep em coming man :worship:
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Postby 4D » Dec 29th, '06, 04:02

Killa wrote:ive gone into sleep problems again where im tiiiiiiiiired as fuck but cannot sleep lol. so im wondering round my house doing nothing lmao


Lol, should visit Zombieland. That place still exist?
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Postby 4D » Dec 29th, '06, 04:11

steverocks88 wrote:damn that was fricking sick can't wait to see what you create during battle time lol

keep em coming man :worship:


hehe, thanks. Well, you won't know it's me because I`ll have an alias. But, I think everyone will recognise my rhymes. :whistle:
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