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I Hate You (w/a new part)

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I Hate You (w/a new part)

Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 07:00

i hate you, you wanna know why
i hate you, becuz tha way you make me feel inside
i hate you, you f*ckin prick
i hate you, go suck shaggys and voilent j's d*ck


Why aren
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Postby MoBrat » Dec 30th, '06, 07:14

wow good work it has good rhyming/flow and its got emotion keep up the good work :worship:
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Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 07:20

thanx ... yeah it was easy to put emotion in it ... that stupid clown makes me have alot of emotion ...

but yeah thanx ;)
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Postby MoBrat » Dec 30th, '06, 07:23

Rae wrote:thanx ... yeah it was easy to put emotion in it ... that stupid clown makes me have alot of emotion ...

but yeah thanx ;)


:laughing: i know that feeling and no problem im always glad 2 read other ppl's good work :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 30th, '06, 07:40

wow this is big step in the rhyming department lol

the last four lines are my favorite lol :worship:

good way to release your anger :flower:
hope your feeling better ;)
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Postby Hoopz » Dec 30th, '06, 10:44

great job rae. nice to let your feelings out :). keep it up ;)
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Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 10:45

thanx every1 :D

i app. it ... i wanna send him this soooo bad lol :D
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Postby MoBrat » Dec 30th, '06, 10:45

:laughing: then do it if u want 2 send it 2 him so bad :D
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Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 10:49

MoBrat wrote::laughing: then do it if u want 2 send it 2 him so bad :D



i would vut 1st of all he is very very voilent just ask steve ...
second i dont want him 2 think i care ... lol
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Postby MoBrat » Dec 30th, '06, 10:51

violent ppl aren't kool but good reasons..anyway im off topic so i'll stop posting stuff
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Postby ShadyAngel » Dec 30th, '06, 14:24

great flow, great feeling, great words, great emotion... its the best one ive read on the site.
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Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 19:01

:confusion: wow thats a HUGE complement! lol
ehh i tried ... and it helps when ur really pissed.
thanx for tha feedback! :D
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Postby C-Game » Dec 30th, '06, 19:41

o i know abt him rae
nice nice stuff
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Postby Rae » Dec 30th, '06, 20:24

thank you :D

yeah hes a %&*@&#@ *@&#% &^*&)& *&^)(*&)(* and the list just keeps goin on and on :D
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