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short verse in progress/ feed please

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short verse in progress/ feed please

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 12th, '07, 02:54

I'm Bizzack Back 2 Bizz
With Facts I make Rap my Bitch
no 1 This Exact u just Act It
Sit Class yor Slacking
so just Wish That my Attack Miss
but It's Intact so Relax Kid
Make Way or Stay Fake
no Mistake Play I Relay 2 Break
Minds and Thoughts u Ought 2 Find
Time is Forgot u Opt 4 Designs
yur Behind Distraught Caught by Mine

I'll Tell u in Advance
don't Dwell on yur Chance
I'll send yur Plans 2 Hell
I can make Demands as Well
Last edited by Rain Matrix on Jan 14th, '07, 07:05, edited 1 time in total.
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Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 12th, '07, 03:04

Not bad, I like it for only a couple lines. But, it is only a couple lines. Overall 7/10, probably a 9 for the potential of a full-length (did I word that right?).
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Postby Inzanity » Jan 12th, '07, 13:23

not bad but it must be a really short verse that ur working on
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